User:Asku7/Weddell seal/Sydneybarker Peer Review

Thermoregulation[edit]
Neonatal Weddell seals have unique thermoregulatory strategies. Pups are not born with brown fat, as used in many species for thermoregulation (Elsner et. al. 1977). Instead, they heavily rely on lanugo, which is a fine layer of hair on the surface of their skin (Pearson et. al. 2014). Studies also revealed the high levels of enzyme activity in Weddell seal pup muscles, suggesting that a primary thermoregulatory strategy of the seals includes muscle thermogenesis (Pearson et. al. 2014).

Lead

 * it does not appear that the article lead has been updated yet to reflect the new section "thermoregulation"
 * the rough draft does include information not present in the article

Content

 * the rough draft is informative but easy to read
 * i would include hyperlinks to the more challenging terms like thermoregulatory and muscle thermogenesis (what is this? why is it relevant to seal pups?)
 * i would also be more straightforward in your introductory sentence, why are the thermoregulatory strategies unique?
 * this rough draft is not overly detailed and would be easy enough to understand for a middle school reader

Tone

 * the tone is neutral and does not appear to have outside opinions if either source or the author itself

Overall Impressions

 * this rough draft is a great start to further improving the Weddell seal article. there is not a dedicated section to thermoregulation and i believe that this draft and its future updates will be vital.

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