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Charlotte Murchison (née Hugonin; 18 April 1788 – 9 February 1869) was a Scottish amateur geologist. Married to the nineteenth century geologist Roderick Impey Murchison, she had a strong influence in the career of her husband.

In 1815, Charlotte Hugonin met Roderick Murchison and married him on 15 August of the same year. She was the daughter of General Francis Hugonin (d. 1836). She remembered her father as someone who was very intelligent and she remembered her mother as a skillful florist and botanist[1] Her husband followed some rather expensive pursuits and in an attempt to occupy him in more intellectual pursuits, Charlotte traveled throughout France, the Alps, and Italy with him in 1816–1818.[2] On the trip, Charlotte would look at wild-flowers that were abnormal to certain altitudes, mountains, and rocks.[1]

They met Mary Somerville (1780–1872), who was a scientific writer and became a lifelong friend of the couple.[1] Mary Somerville wrote about Charlotte Murchison and said that she was the reason why her husband developed increasing interest towards geology.[3]

Unfortunately, during her travels to Rome in 1817. Charlotte contracted malaria while her traveling companions became ill from exhaustion. Despite her disease, she was able to nurse Roderick Murchison and Charles Lyell back to health.[4]

The lecture theatres of Kings College London were accessible to female geology students, due to Charlotte, even though she was suffering from her disease.[3]

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Personal Life

Charlotte Murchison (née Hugonin; 18 April 1788 – 9 February 1869) was born in Hampshire, United Kingdom to parents General Francis Hugonin and Charlotte Hugonin.[citation] Charlotte remembered her father as an intelligent, remarkable man and her mother as one gifted as a florist and botanist.[citation]. She would later meet a soldier by the name of Roderick Impey Murchison, to whom she would marry. [citation]

In 1815, Charlotte Hugonin met Roderick Murchison and married him on 15 August of the same year. Her husband followed some rather expensive pursuits and in an attempt to occupy him in more intellectual pursuits, Charlotte traveled throughout France, the Alps, and Italy with him in 1816–1818. On the trip, Charlotte would look at wild-flowers that were abnormal to certain altitudes, mountains, and rocks.

They met Mary Somerville (1780–1872), who was a scientific writer and became a lifelong friend of the couple.[1] Mary Somerville wrote about Charlotte Murchison and said that she was the reason why her husband developed increasing interest towards geology.[3]

Unfortunately, during her travels to Rome in 1817. Charlotte contracted malaria while her traveling companions became ill from exhaustion. Despite her disease, she was able to nurse Roderick Murchison and Charles Lyell back to health.[4]

The lecture theatres of Kings College London were accessible to female geology students, due to Charlotte, even though she was suffering from her disease.[3]

Peer Review by StafferBobb (talk) 15:44, 22 March 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review of Charlotte Murchison


 * 1) You have some good edits and changes to make the article flow a little better such as moving who her parentage was to the first paragraph and putting where she was born.
 * 2) I think that it is still important to say that she is Scottish somewhere in the first paragraph. It is good to keep nationality of the person.
 * 3) Being an influence to her husband is also important to her life.
 * 4) The line describing her parents feels a bit odd and if there was more to go with it, it would be better if there was more to go with it. It is still good to have things about her parents.
 * 5) Other notes: adding more about her work in the field of geology or what she and her husband did together in the field of geology
 * 6) Things that happened in her life from 1817 to her death in 1869.

Overall the article has a good start and there are good things that you have added to the article. Don't forget to include your sources in the final draft and include where you used the sources you found. Good work.

StafferBobb (talk) 15:44, 22 March 2019 (UTC)

Wikipedia Project Article Choice
Reason for Choice = start-class article, famous geologist, fair amount of preliminary sources found, woman in science, article doesn't give much info on her

Missing from Article: The article is lacking in depth on her life and work which should be the reason for her article. More space is given to her husband and their friends than her actual work/efforts. There is a lack of organization and sectioning that would provide some beauty to the article. There is not a picture of her anywhere on the page.

What to Add: I would like to add a picture of her, more info on her work, less on her husband and their friends, and possibly more about her life outside of her work such as children, interest, etc.

Sources:


 * https://trowelblazers.com/charlotte-murchison/
 * https://www.jstor.org/stable/24136821?seq=1#page_scan_tab_contents
 * https://sp.lyellcollection.org/content/287/1/109/tab-figures-data
 * https://books.google.com/books?id=Jh4LAAAAIAAJ&pg=PA14&lpg=PA14&dq=charlotte+murchison&source=bl&ots=2DEcrHDITO&sig=ACfU3U2F8BZciB9S2zr7yNdgIk31Of_Mdg&hl=en&sa=X&ved=2ahUKEwj6irTN0PHgAhVOnKwKHaYXDNM4ChDoATABegQICRAB#v=onepage&q=charlotte%20murchison&f=false
 * https://books.google.com/books?id=olMgmIYuMPYC&pg=PA109&lpg=PA109&dq=charlotte+murchison&source=bl&ots=5n6gWb0Aun&sig=ACfU3U1FgWQ56CUfR4k_i7Ft1E3xKvQ8nA&hl=en&sa=X&ved=2ahUKEwj6irTN0PHgAhVOnKwKHaYXDNM4ChDoATAJegQIABAB#v=onepage&q=charlotte%20murchison&f=false
 * https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/08905495.2017.1311654?journalCode=gncc20

Amanda Skeeters (talk) 16:52, 1 March 2019 (UTC) Amanda Skeeters (talk) 03:51, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

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Article Evaluation Charlotte Murchison Article

Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? No, or at least it skips around too much. By this I mean it switches too much from talking about her, to her husband, to friends they met, etc. Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? What else could be improved? The article drops small little hints into how she would behave on trips but there was never any lead up. Such as how on her trip throughout the Alps, Italy, etc she would examine flowers, rock, etc that she found peculiar. There is a gap between when she got sick to speaking about how she contributed to women having availability to lectures at Kings College of London. Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? Yes, the article is neutral and, as far as I can see, does not appear heavily biased toward a particular position. Are there viewpoints that are over represented, or underrepresented? It doesn't seem that there are viewpoints that are over or underrepresented Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? The links work but one of them led me to a site to buy the book with the information backing the citation, not to the information itself. Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? No they are not all referenced with a reliable source. One of the links actually led me to the ancestry.com login screen. From what I can see, the reliable sources were not biased. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? There are no conversations in the Talk page. There have been no edits for about a month's time How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? This article is rated as Start-Class and is part of 3 WikiProjects. The Wikiprojects are Science and Academia, Women scientists, and Geology How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class? At times they talked more about her husband and their friends than her. Amanda Skeeters (talk) 16:55, 22 February 2019 (UTC)