User:Asp2181/Bordetella pertussis/Abbievaughn Peer Review

General info
(Asp2181)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Asp2181/Bordetella pertussis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Bordetella pertussis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead introductory sentence is clear and descriptive. Good detailed additions made throughout lead. Maybe add a summary of the different sections that will be covered.

Content: Good additions made here. I like how you included statistics regarding infant fatalities, it gives perspective to the article. I also like that you added how the bacteria was directly transmitted. Maybe expand on how it can survive in respiratory epithelial and phagocytic cells. All additions are up to date and relevant. I also liked the addition of how the disease progresses. I think that is important process of understanding the bacteria fully.

Tone: The draft maintains a neutral tone not making any bold statements. Each section is even in length including clear details and descriptions.

Sources: All links were current and working. Multiple different sources used meaning a good combination of information and resources coming into the article.

organization: clear distinctions between each section. The summaries were well-written and easy to follow

Overall: I think the group is doing a good job overall so far. Clear and detailed additions have been made so far expanding on what the article already stated.