User:Asp2181/Bordetella pertussis/ShelbyGodby Peer Review

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Asp2181
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Overall, the article is filled with great information and provides lots of interesting background on the bacteria. One of the only suggestions that I would make is to check and make sure each sentence is supported with evidence. Even if you already stated the source, I would recite it. For example, the last sentences in the introduction and the last paragraph under Transmission and Infection do not have evidence to support them. You may want to look into adding a picture on the main page, but just a suggestion. Also, maybe rearrange some of the wording in the introduction paragraph. Some of them seem to be arranged to where it makes it kind of difficult to read. Other than those few corrections the grammar, spelling, and punctuation looks great. The article is laid out in a balanced way and flows properly through the breakdown of information about the bacteria. The tone is also professional and sounds exactly as it should be.