User:Assumption25/Dysfunctional family/GraceRinaldi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rosemary


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Assumption25/Dysfunctional_family?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dysfunctional family

Evaluate the drafted changes
Rosies Edit:

'''The first issue that I have with this section of the article is that it is comprised in a list format. When information is put into a list it tends to make it extremely informal and can make it seem of less value and importance. I also do not find it necessary to list every aspect of the Laundry list, rather there could be paraphrasing included. I would recommend reworking this section into a paragraph format:'''

'''The program "Adult Children of Alcoholics" includes something labeled as a "Laundry List". This list has 14 different statements that relate to being an adult child of a parent with an alcohol addiction. These statements provide commentary on how children have been affected by the trauma of having alcoholic parents. Some highlights of the statements include, "confusing love and pity", "having low self-esteem", and having a "loss of identity". The Laundry list is a helpful tool in group therapy in order to show families that they are not alone in their struggles.'''

Peer review: I find your tone to be a lot more informational than the original article. I also like that you took the source and elaborated on it without throwing all the source in quotes at once. The content you change and restructured is relevant. That being said, if I was you, I'd elaborate on the concept "Laundry list" you used a lot. You say the laundry list is a helpful tool in group therapy and I like that, just thing you should say x,y,z on how it is. I liked that you improved not listing all 14 different statements, as the original article was overwhelming.

Rosies Edit:

After the "effects on Children" section - add two sections labeled: "Positive Outcomes", and "Resources and Hope"

"Positive Outcomes" Sources: https://bandbacktogether.com/master-resource-links-2/family-resources/adult-children-of-dysfunctional-families/ (ideas -- not real source), https://academic.oup.com/hsw/article/22/3/201/593640?login=true

'''Although there are many negative outcomes that came come from growing up in a dysfunctional household, the brain can be able to produce positive ones as well. As discussed in the article, "Adult Children of Dysfunctional Families", resilience is something that can come out of these obstacles in children's lives and make for a brighter future. Resilience is defined as something positive that is able to be brought forth from negative experiences in childhood. (Resilience in Adult Children of Alcoholics: A Nonpathological Approach to Social Work Practice). This refers to the ability for children who go through many hardships with their parents growing up to be able to take those hardships and learn from them in order to develop better coping strategies and find meaning in their futures. For example, when children find themselves in a dysfunctional family life, they may take the route of either isolating themselves, or reaching out for help. When children reach out for help, they can develop resiliency over time by fostering positive relationships with guidance counselors, or other trusted adults that will continue to stay strong after they become adults themselves.'''

Peer Review:

I like the two sections you intend to add under the "Effects on Children", it will add a lot to the original article. I will say I think you talk a lot about resilience, and more of what resilience can cause as an outcome and now so much how does a child gain this resilience to have these positive outcomes.