User:Assumption25/Dysfunctional family/Oliviaheaney Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Username: assumption25


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Assumption25/Dysfunctional_family?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- the title is good but maybe a little confusing in the part that says "adult children" maybe say "as children grow up"

- I agree that the first paragraph seems like a list. Maybe make each point that is in the list their own paragraph and expand the sections.

- I like how you added the comment about group therapy

- I think your content is really up to date and neutral you do not sound opinionated or bias.

- The content you added is very relevant I would just make sure the sources you use are all factual not opinion based

- i think the sections you added of "positive outcomes" and "resources and help" are really relevant and add great content

- Make sure to go over grammar and spelling before you actually publish the new sections

- Maybe find more articles to use to add from