User:Astebbins/Foster care/Safabsr Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Astebbins)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Astebbins/Foster_care?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Foster care

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- Overall, your lead is very organized, giving a detailed outline of your article contributions, especially through including the sections you'll specifically be adding to. Furthermore, it effectively communicates the significance of the contributions to the article and topic as a whole.

Content:

- Overall, your content is extremely concise and informative, providing an effective dissection of foster care while maintaining simplicity. The information and wording is easy to digest and supported by numerous credible, scholarly sources.

- "Their inter-organizational networks enable access to “critical resources and expertise, thereby altering agency service technology and enhancing frontline service capacity”."- add hyphen to inter organizational; also, if possible, try adding one or two brief examples of the "critical resources," and the ways they enhance frontline capacities. This may help readers better understand this sector debate in depth. It doesnt have to be anything long and extensive, just a sentence or two to give readers a better understanding.

- (The above paragraph can be placed in the "Placement" section of the article or the subsection of "United States")- if its applicable to the systems within most countries, i would suggest putting it under placement

-(The above paragraph can be placed in the "United States" subsection but I am open to other suggestions)- i think it should be placed under united states since its specifically addressing the racial skew within the US; this paragraph was super informative, well-worded, and effectively structured :)

-Ethical concerns have also been raised by Therese Aström and other associated researchers: one the one hand MTFC is evaluated as effective, however it tends to be implemented in a way that diminishes the child's agency. - clarify who therese astrom is (include credentials) to solidify this statement

- can you possibly create subsections within the united states section to include information or phenomena relating to foster care that is only relevant to the united states system. this could include