User:Ataylor41/Black Girl in Paris/Erthorndyke Peer Review

General info
Ataylor41
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ataylor41/Black Girl in Paris
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Black Girl in Paris

Content
Content is relevant. Edited critical reception and plot summary sections. Created theme section and started character list.

Tone and Balance
Writing is neutral. None of the claims are heavily biased. Content does not attempt to persuade the reader.

Sources and References
Film Adaptation section does not have sources included. Not needed in character section. Content accurately reflects information found in JSTOR article in Importance of Paris Section.

Organization
Content is well-written and easy-to-read. Check for grammar errors.

Commas->

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As an independent woman, Eden makes the crucial decision of leaving her home and family behind to go to Paris. In Shay Youngblood's Escape from "the last plantation", Jones...

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Images and Media
Added photo of novel cover. Could add more information in the info box, like publishing date or isbn.

Overall Impressions
Content added improves quality of original article.

Consider:


 * Finishing character list: Luce, maybe Aunt Vic, other characters
 * Adding links to other wikipedia articles
 * In Reception - Gaiutra Bahadur
 * In Film Adaptation - Tisch School of the Arts, American Black Film Festival
 * Breaking links for words that have multiple: Paris, James Baldwin
 * Expanding plot summary further. I get the impression that the plot summary is heavy on the first half of the novel. If this is the case, consider expanding it with information from the latter half.
 * Adding commas for prepositional phrases.
 * Adding to the info box. Example: