User:Athanasius22/Differential Fitness/Bhuggins2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Athanasius22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Differential fitness - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Differential fitness - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Section:

Overall, the lead section was great. I think it did a good job giving an overview of all of the ways that differential fitness could be at play in nature. I left some "Invisible Comments" throughout the lead section with some ideas. None of these were suggestions to change the content of the section, rather, were ideas to make it a bit more concise. I liked how each concept of differential fitness (behavioral response, between species responses, sex differences, etc) was followed by an appropriate study. I clicked each link following the references and they all brought me to the papers being referenced, which was great. Nice job!

Environmental response differential fitness:

I thought this section was super well done. One thing you might consider changing is the title. While the section does talk about environmental changes, I think the main focus is on behavioral changes. I added a coma somewhere and swapped "due" to "attributed" in a sentence, but beyond that, I have no other comments or suggestions for this portion of the article. The papers that were used to support this section were great and provided very clear examples.

Differential fitness between species:

Again, I feel the same way about this section as I did the previous one. I added a few words/comments, but overall, I think the format and content was well done. There was a portion about pythons that I left an "Invisible Comment" by, but it was a minor suggestion. I checked the links to the references and they all worked properly.

Multitrait differential fitness:

This section was a bit hard to understand. I left some invisible comments that I thought might help make it a little more clear. There was one sentence ("Multiple floral traits can have different fitness benefits and pressures due to pollinators and environmental conditions") that is a bit vague and doesn't seem to connect the idea of multiple traits influencing an individual organism's fitness. I think the next part, which talks about animals, is more clear because specific traits are touched on which help the reader to understand how multiple traits could cause differential fitness.

Sex based differential fitness:

Overall, I thought this section was very well done. I really liked the examples that were given, they did a great job emphasizing the point of the section. I offered one comment by virtue of an "Invisible Comment" that I think could help make the first sentence more clear, but other than that, I think this section is great. I also followed the links to the references and found that they all worked.

All in all, great job! This article was awesome.