User:Athanasius22/Differential Fitness/MarleyMae21 Peer Review

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Athanasius22


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 * Differential fitness

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I thought the intro was well written! One tip I would give would be to maybe save the examples you used for the content sections later on, just so the intro doesn't get too detailed. Other than that, I think it gave a clear picture of what the rest of the article would be about. You could also maybe add a sentence or two on the significance of studying this or why it is important if you wanted to improve it! Overall, it was a solid intro, I enjoyed it!

For the content, I loved all the examples you used, that is definitely a strength for this article. After reading this, it definitely made me more interested in the topic than I was before. I made a few invisible comments with some suggestions, mostly just rephrasing a few things. I think you have a nice writing style and the article is written in a clear way that can be understood by someone with limited knowledge on the topic. I really enjoyed the final section, lots of cool examples!

Tone - The tone was neutral, not persuasive in any way.

Sources - you had lots of examples and all of them appeared to be cited correctly. The links to the sources work as well from the ones I clicked on.

Overall - I loved the article, super cool topic, I wish I had thought of it! I learned a lot from reading it, so that is always a good sign! Other than the suggestions mentioned above or in the invisible comments, you might think of adding a picture, even if it is just a picture of a popular organism used in studies on this topic, just to tie it together and make it more aesthetically pleasing.

Update - I tried to leave invisible comments but it ended up deleting them after I published them for some reason. Basically, I had just suggested that maybe you should change the first sentence of the last section to something with more simpler terms, it was a little difficult to understand. And then I agree with whoever commented about changing the title of the first content section as well! Sorry for the confusion!