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Career
In 1908, Dohan started her career as an instructor of classical archaeology at Mount Holyoke College. During her time at Mount Holyoke College Hall was allowed to return to Crete to continue her excavations during the Spring semesters and taught during the Fall. Her time teaching at Mount Holyoke College came to an end in 1912 but Hall would return to give a presentation in 1913. Hall returned to Bryn Mawr College in 1921 to be a part time instructor. In 1942, Dohan became an assistant curator at the University Museum at University of Pennsylvania. Dohan eventually became its associate curator, then its citation.

Dohan later went on to do noteworthy work on ancient Greece and at points visited Crete. Later in life she became interested in the Etruscan civilization. She published an important corpus of Italic tomb groups held in the collection of the University of Pennsylvania Museum of Archaeology and Anthropology.

Education[edit]
Edith attended Woodstock Academy in Woodstock, Connecticut along with her brother and sister where her father Ely Hall was the principal.

Hall then attended Smith College in Northampton, MA. Her classes included Greek, Latin, Mathematics. In 1899, Hall received her B.A. from Smith College. Hall then pursued her graduate studies at Bryn Mawr College in Bryn Mawr, Pennsylvania. During her time at Bryn Mawr she was awarded the Mary E. Garrett Fellowship. Hall applied for the Agnes Hoppin Memorial Fellow at the American School of Classical Studies in Athens. She was selected for the fellowship and started at the school in Fall of 1903. '''Hall was the only female student and stayed at the Merlin House which was close to the school.  Hall decided to study Mycenaean items and their patterns. After collecting a large sample size she decided to focus on Cretan items specifically. Hall used her samples to create a outline of a timeline for Minoan pottery.''' Hall's time at the American School of Classical studies came to an end in 1905. In 1906, Dohan earned a PhD in classical archaeology from Bryn Mawr College.

Dohan's 1907 dissertation focused on art in Bronze Age Crete.

Peer Review by Greg Walker
Cregwalker (talk) 15:34, 18 October 2019 (UTC) This draft does a good job of expanding upon Edith Hall Dohan’s education and experience at university. The original article simply mentions the degrees she earned and where she got them, but the draft adds additional information about her notable achievements at university. There are a couple of things here that could be tidied up, however. Most of the article refers to her as Dohan, but in the modified section she is referred to as Edith. This should be kept consistent, and I think generally the surname would be used. Additionally, it is not wrong there are all the different subsections (early life, education, etc.) but I do not know if it is necessary given the amount of information present. There are three citations in the section, which seems redundant given they are all citing the same reference [1]. Finally, (yes, I am being nit-picky) the sentence “Her classes included Greek, Latin, Mathematics and various other courses” could probably be shortened to “Her classes included Greek, Latin, and Mathematics” without losing meaning. So, the information is good, but I think it needs to be cleaned up.

Response: I agree with the changes that I need to make. I think my goal was to not use the same name over and over but in the end it might be confusing for the reader if I keep hopping around. I also agree with the citation and will find some clarity on if the whole paragraph can be cited once at the end or if it needs to be cited multiple times. I will also be removing the part where it says "and various other courses" cause I think it doesn't add anything important. Thank you for the review and the advice on how to make my article better.

Peer Review by Carlos Cook
Cocz6d (talk) 15:37, 18 October 2019 (UTC) I think your article has a very neat timeline of events for Edith. They flow together without sounding choppy. A nice addition to the article, if the information is available, is to add small events/clubs that she joined while in each school. Also a few sentences refer to her by her last name of Dohan while others refer to her by her first name Edith. I think an improvement would be to change all of them to one name, preferably her last name. One thing I noticed about your article that is currently not in my own is the small citations that show which references are associated to which sentences. Overall, great job with your edit!

Response: I will be on the lookout for more information on things she did while at her schools. I like this idea because those bits of information help the reader know what the person did. I also agree that it needs to be one name because it makes it clear to the reader who they are reading about. Thank you for your review and the changes that you recommended. I will make sure to go in and implement these changes.

Peer Review by Rebecca Marcolina
What does the draft do well?


 * I agree with a few of the other peer reviews – I think you definitely expanded on her education section quite well. I think that you all found a lot of great information about her research which would have been one of my first questions about her work and background as a reader.

What changes would I suggest the author apply to the article?


 * I noticed that you refer to Edith Hall by her first name, but it seems that most Wikipedia articles tend to refer to their subjects by last name. I think that this revision could help this article align itself a bit more closely with others on the site, though you may have to determine when to use “Hall” vs. when to use “Dohan” – asking Dr. Sheppard about which is most appropriate could be a good place to start. I also noticed that some of the content you added to the article was not cited clearly, so I might suggest adding some more explicit citations, especially for the portions describing her fellowship awards. Lastly, you comment that Hall received two fellowships but only one is listed under the “Awards” section.

What’s the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?


 * I noticed that the original wiki article on Edith Hall Dohan commented that she, “…went on to do noteworthy work on ancient Greece” and that she “…published an important corpus of Italic tomb groups”. I would be really interested to hear more about her contributions to the field! I don’t know if you could find the information, but I also think it would be neat to learn a little bit more about her research as a graduate student as well. If you find enough information, you could always include another section for her research.

Did you notice anything about the article that could be applicable in my own article?


 * Tyler and I have been struggling with the decision of how to revise the outline of our article, as the content was quite “all over the place”. I liked this article’s use of broad headings like “Career” – if we were to apply this to our article, we could then use subheadings under career to highlight Mitchell’s work with the US Coast Survey and Vassar College.

Response: First of all thank you for your response. I was not one hundred percent sure about which name to refer to her as so I got clarity from Dr. Sheppard and will be referring to her as Hall before she returns from Greece and then Hall Dohan when she returns. Hopefully referring to her by these names will be clear for future readers. I wasn't working on awards yet but I will make sure to add that because it will maintain the continuity of our Wikipedia page. I also will make sure to add the citations to all of my sentences. I was misguided because I thought I could add the citation at the end of the paragraph. I will go back and add the citation to each of the sentences. I really like the idea of adding a citation about her research cause I think if the right sources were found then I could add a new section. Thank you again for your response and the changes that you suggested.

Edith Hall Dohan Notes
Edith attended Woodstock Academy in Woodstock, Connecticut along with her brother and sister where her father Ely Hall was the principal.

Edith Hall Dohan Sources
Cohen, Getzel M., and Martha S. Joukowsky. Breaking Ground: Pioneering Women Archaeologists. University of Michigan Press, Ann Arbor, 2004;2010;2006;, doi:10.3998/mpub.17654.

Sicherman, Barbara, Carol H. Green, and Winfield Collection (University of Missouri--Columbia. Libraries). Notable American Women: The Modern Period : A Biographical Dictionary. Belknap Press of Harvard University Press, Cambridge, Mass, 1980.

Edith Hall Dohan Questions
We chose this article because we are interested in women in archaeology and wanted to provide more information on these women. The article is missing pictures, many of Edith Hall Dohan's life and the works that she was apart of, and it needs to have plenty of information gaps filled. We want to add more information about her works and her life so that people are aware of what she has accomplished.

Article Evaluation
Rachel Lloyd (chemist)

•Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?

The article is pretty much on topic. There were a few times when the article would make major jumps in one sentence so this was quite distracting.

•Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

I would say that the article is neutral in presents the information with little to no bias and allows the reader to learn about the topic person. It just lacks information to fill in time period gaps.

•Are there viewpoints that are over represented, or underrepresented?

I would say that her work with sugar beets is under represented. There is no information on what she did with her studies on the beets. The article also could use some more information on some other works she has accomplished.

•Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?

Some links work and some take the reader to error pages. The sources are very sporadic and seem to not be credible sources. One of the pages takes you to a grave finding website that doesn't seem too official

• Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?

A good amount of the facts are cited but some of the citations and references take you to websites that do not seem reputable. The information comes from sporadic writings and websites that when visited the cited information isn't available and has to be searched for.

•Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?

There are some time frames of her life that are missing and can be added. There is also plenty of information that can be added on her works and what she had accomplished.

• Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?

There are some questions being asked on where some of this missing information on her life is.

•How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?

It is a start class and it is apart of the WikiProject Biography group and the WikiProject Women scientist group.

•How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

We have talked extensively about the impact that women have had throughout the history of science. We know that there are so many accomplishments that women have made. When we look at this specific article we even see that there are major things that Rachel Lloyd has accomplished but we get a fly over version instead of deeper look into the works she accomplished. So the goal will be to dive deeper into her works and how her studies impacted the scientific community.