User:Audkal/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Ray Eames

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I have heard and read that resources about Ray Eames are not very substantive, especially when compared to her husband and creative partner Charles Eames. It is my understanding that there are lots of sources about Ray Eames and her life and work, but that they have not been compiled in many places.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section

The lead section seems sufficient when I look at just the Ray Eames article. But when I compare it to the Wikipedia article on Charles Eames, the lead section there is notably more thorough. Also, the lead section mentions Ray Eames' contributions to the fields of "architecture, furniture design, industrial design, manufacturing and the photographic arts," but the article does not go into each. That seems like something that could be added to the article.

Content

I do not think the content is up to date, as I believe more recent sources have provided more information about the life and, even more so, the work of Ray Eames. The contrasting level of detail between the Ray Eames article and the Charles Eames article seems to be relevant to the equity gap between men and women.

Tone and Balance

The tone seems neutral to me.

Sources and References

The sources do not seem thorough enough to me. Several of the sources are from journalistic sources, which is fine, but it seems as though there are more recent sources from scholarly sources that would be more in depth.

Organization and Writing Quality

The writing and grammar seem fine, but I don't think the organization of the article makes sense. The "Work and Education" section I believe could be expanded with more sources. The "Marriage to Charles Eames" section also seems inappropriately short. But the two sections "The Eames House" and "The Eames Office" seem like they need the most work. "The Eames House" seems like it should be mentioned later, and also should be broken up into smaller paragraphs, perhaps even subsections. "The Eames Office" seems like it should be much more thorough, as this is where most of Ray Eames' work would have happened. As I wrote in the first section of my comments, the article does not go into all the fields in which Ray Eames worked ("architecture, furniture design, industrial design, manufacturing and the photographic arts.")

Images and Media

There are not enough images, especially for someone who had such a long and influential artistic career.

Talk Page Discussion

There was a discussion in 2015 that resulted in the merging of the Ray Eames page with the Charles Eames page into "Charles and Ray Eames," a separate page. This seems to be a problem due to how they were separate people, and also that does not seem to be the norm for creative pairs. The article is part of WikiProject Biography / Arts and Entertainment, WikiProject Women, and WikiProject United States. The topic of Ray Eames has not yet been discussed in this class, but the Ray Eames wiki article does seem insufficient compared to other contexts in which I have learned about her life (museum shows, books, etc).

Overall Impressions

The article could be improved a lot, and is not up to date with the current state of knowledge on Ray Eames. The article could be improved greatly by the use of more recent, scholarly sources about Ray Eames. Also by keeping in mind that Ray Eames existed beyond just her partnership with Charles Eames.