User:Audkal/Ray Eames/Henshena Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Audkal


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Audkal/Ray Eames


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ray Eames

Evaluate the drafted changes
- There is a good amount of information about her professional life and that is most likely what readers will come to the page for but I think having more information about her marriage and even her friends would benefit the article. The Eames Office section more confused me the was helpful so if there was a better summary of what is was that would be helpful. I also noticed there is no section on her earlier paintings that are mentioned in her early days. Is there any information you could add to the struggles she would have faced doing this in that time period?

- I like the addition of the images. It really helps bring her work to life.

-The article has a lot of good sources. I'm not sure what sources you have included because your bibliography isn't showing any. I might be looking in the wrong place but I would double check that you have at least 5 sources.

-I like how you are breaking down the work and education section to make it easier to find certain information.

-I would consider adding more information to the lead that foreshadows what the rest of the article is about.

- Since Ray was a women aspiring innovator during the time period we are studying this topic fits into our class.

Great Job!