User:Audlz/Chen Mingxia (1940-Present)/Carnation001 Peer Review

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Audlz
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(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi, I enjoyed reading your article! Here is my peer review:

Lead

The introductory sentence is clear and representative of the article's main points. However, the article could benefit from a roadmap explaining the following sections, which would help its overall structure and organization. I think that including a few sentences to a paragraph devoted to explaining how you will present the topic would be useful for readers to have a better understanding of the article's main points.

Content

The content added is relevant to the topic and also up-to-date. The article does a good job adding to a topic that has not been written about and one that is very important. I believe it would be strengthen the piece to add a section on historical context, as this helps readers understand what was going on during the time in which the activist was prominent.

Tone and Balance

The tone was neutral and unbiased, and overall I think you did a great job of utilizing neutral language in the article. I did not feel persuaded while reading the article, and instead felt as though I was just learning about the feminist, her life, and her contributions.

Sources and References

The article utilizes reliable secondary sources, such as scholarly articles from JSTOR and ProQuest. One critique I have, though, is the amount and type of sources. I believe that finding additional sources, as well as different types, such as books, would add more legitimacy to the article and strengthen it significantly. Moreover, some of the sources were not cited properly for Wikipedia, so make sure to change this before submitting the final draft.

Organization

The content added is pretty well-written, but could use some editing in certain parts to make it flow better and maintain grammaticality. Additionally, the section titles could be strengthened and/or changed to create a better article. For example, the first section, "Chen Mingxia," could be changed to "Introduction" or "Lead." I also do not believe the second section, "Legal Scholar Contributes and Educational Background," is grammatically correct, and therefore I believe the editors should change this title.

Images and Media

Your article could benefit from an image so that the audience sees what Chen Mingxia looks like. I also think that including a picture of one of her law pamphlets or other works of writing would be useful for the piece and add to its reliability.

For New Articles

This article meets the Notability requirements, as it is supported by 2-3 verifiable and reliable sources that are independent of the subject it is writing about. Since this is a new article, I would include many more sources so that the piece is more reliable and shows that it uses all the available literature on this subject. Adding additional section headings and organizing it based on historical context and various parts of Chen Mingxia's life would also strengthen it. Additionally, linking the piece to more Wikipedia articles, especially in the first few sections, is a good idea and would make the work stand out as knowledgable and reliable.

Overall Impressions

Overall, I really enjoyed reading your article and found that it filled it gaps in Wikipedia by providing a great example of a prominent Chinese feminist and her extensive contributions to women's rights. Using more sources and choosing ones from different databases as well as books and other forms of media would add reliability and strength to your article. Moreover, editing the article to improve its flow and grammar, for example with the use and absence of commas, and also the use of tenses, will improve it.