User:Audlz/Chen Mingxia (1940-Present)/Jiayi Yan Peer Review

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Lead

The lead is concise and well-written. However, I think it can be better by re-organizing it according to the four sections covered in the article. Right now, after reaidng the introduction, I find it hard to grasp the main structure of article. I would also suggest to add citations to your information in the lead. For example, "She is also a professor who was one of the leaders who initiated an anti-domestic violence project which eventually developed into the first large scale women’s NGOs in China, Stop Domestic Violence." Where does this information come from? And laslty, I think it can also be considered to add time stamps to her activism, so it's more clear and organized for the readers. When exactly did she initiate the anti-domestic violence project?

Content and Organization

Overall, I think the conent is well-researched, and it is also great to strucute the content based on the different types of the activism she's involved in. The information is up-to-date and relevant. However, I would want to know about when and under what circumstances she's engaed in the activism. In other words, probably consider providing time and context for the activism. For example, in "Legal Scholar Contributes and Educational Background," when did she become a legal scholar and researcher at the Institute of Research at the China Academy of Social Science? What was the social, cultural, political climate like back then? In the next section, what is All-China Women’s Federation (ACWF)? When was it established? What was it for? I hold similar concers for the following sections. As a reader, I would like to contextualize the informaiton to better understand her activism and significancce.

Concernting writing mechanics, some sentences can be more polished. For example, "She utilized her legal background to promote the amending of gender equality and domestic violence, protective laws. She utilized her legal background and education to promote the doctrination of these two laws based on women’s human rights." Consider use different verbs so that it's less repetitive?

Lastly, consider adding hyperlinks to connect to other wikipedia articles to make it easier for the readers to research and read more?

Tone and Balance

The tone is balanced, neutral, and factual. Good Job!

Sources and References

The sourcces are great and substantial, but I do think the article should cite more. I understand that it is hard to compose a whole wikipedia page based on five sources, which means that each sentence is a new information and it can look too much when the whole paragraph refered to the same source. But I believe it's better to over-cite rather than under-cite? So definitely cite more to make every piece of new information has a reference.

Notability

The article is backed up with at least 2-3 secondary sources that are substantially about the topic.