User:Audreyb07/J. California Cooper/DominikKonwinski Peer Review

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Audreyb07
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Audreyb07/J. California Cooper
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):J. California Cooper

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like how your lead is formatted and it is informative, but probably needs sources. I really like that you added a featured works section, and splitting the life and career section into early life etc. is a smart move. "time to grow up" in the early life section might be better with quotations (maybe idk). I think that everything you have is really relevant and I probably wouldn't delete any of the information. I think you also did a good job keeping a neutral tone, and I don't see anything that would make me think that you are learning to one side or are biased in any way. Grammar is good and organization is as well, but maybe you could add a few more sections or subsections (family life, inspirations, etc). I'm not sure how far back "early life" typically goes, but it seemed a little off to me that "By age 19, Cooper was married and pregnant with her first child, Paris" was in the early life section rather than life and career; this may be something to look into. I also like that you added a critical reception section, as this is a great way to show how other academics viewed her work. Overall, I think that what you have is really good and I can see that you are headed the right direction. Really, the only thing I think that would be left to do is just add more content and keep doing what you're doing. I think that the strengths for your editing are the organization (generally), conciseness, and neutrality, while you might be able to improve with the length of your article by including more subsections and adding more citations to the lead.

Hope this is helpful!