User:Augiestudent.24/Free Breakfast for Children/Whateveryou'llremember Peer Review

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Lead
The lead is great and accurately and succinctly represents the article as a whole.

Content
Content added in the section about the role of women is helpful, and deliberate.

The title for the 'Women's Role and Inclusion in the Free Breakfast for Children Program' section should be as a header not as its own sentence.

"With similar oppressive roles in the Free Breakfast for Children programs, this program highlighted the gender struggles within the Black Panther Party, as women were reinforced into maternal roles in the program’s kitchens and serving roles."- In this section, the word reinforced might be replaced by a better word, or the sentence structure changed to make more sense. For example: The program reinforced maternal stereotypes about women through their role in the program's kitchen and serving roles.

Tone/Balance
"The existence of Black Panther chapters founded and run by women showed equal commitment to what the Party stood for." This statement is more of an argumentative statement rather than a statement of fact.

"The necessity of having the Houston chapter didn’t gain importance in their community until Carl Hampton established People's Party II (PP II) in 1970; his murder would play a pivotal role in their chapter gaining membership." Necessity is an evaluative term here. To avoid this you should probably rewrite the sentence and/or change the word. For example: "Carl Hampton's death in 1970 enraged many Houstanites, and consequently, membership in Hampton's "People's Party" rose significantly."

Sources & References
'''"Moreover, women-based Free Breakfast programs within chapters founded by women helped to lessen the stereotypes often associated with women's roles in the party." "The Washington chapter of the Black Panther Party experienced support from a Seattle native, Jimi Hendrix. He would often send donations to the Seattle chapter of the BPP's free breakfast program. "''' Source this.

All sources are great, credible, peer-reviewed sources.

Organization
Good overall writing and composition.

Overall Impression
Well-sourced, good, relevant, and comprehensive information. The writing is easy to read and helpful. Only some minor issues, be sure to avoid normative words and make sure every sentence is a statement rather than an argument. Great overall.