User:Avaellea/Hunger in the United States/Urmilav Peer Review

General info
Avaellea
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Avaellea/Hunger in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hunger in the United States

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The article highlights the emergence of obesity and diabetes, exacerbated by the consumption of low-nutrient foods distributed by food banks. This issue disproportionately affects lower-income communities, contributing to higher rates of chronic diseases and escalating healthcare costs. I like how Ava's discussion adds significant detail to the discussion to show how extensive the issue.

The discussion extends to the challenges faced by individuals residing in food deserts, primarily concerning transportation to access food sources. The article suggests that the federal government should dismantle barriers and establish grocery stores, especially in urban areas where lower-income communities may struggle to reach distant grocery stores. Ava maintains a clear structure in this section, making the article very easily digestible. However, I think she could add another subheading for the section that she added on the quality of food bank food (and obesity and diabetes). There are no clear grammatical errors.

Ava cites her sources well, ensuring that new information is verified. While the article provides valuable insights into the complex issue of hunger and its consequences, there are areas that need improvement. I think overall, she maintains good readability, but there is room for rearranging the headings/further organizing her new sections to make it more clear. I enjoyed reading this sandbox, and it is definitely very strong!