User:Avela057/Homininae/Pancakes2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Avela057/Homininae?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Homininae

Evaluate the drafted changes
The edited article has multiple sources in the References section but, as the author states, they still need to be incorporated into the article and formatted. The grammar seems good and the information is presented in a balanced and informative manner. There is one sentence where it says "According to researchers" where I feel that it would be more appropriate to the Wikipedia site to just state the fact and include a citation at the end of the sentence. In addition, the word "bipedalist" is used a lot in the edited sections but not at all in the original homininae article, so this could confuse people. It might be better to match the wording/nouns used throughout the main article.