User:Avelizmarjard1/sandbox

Article Evaluation
School shooting

1. one thing that was said in this article that distracted me was how they said age and maturity plays a huge role in school shootings. After most of the shootings happen they normally say that it has to do with how their home life was and how they were treated when they were younger so I don't think maturity has anything to do with it. 2. This article is neutral, it doesn't state how anyone feels about the topic just kind of describes what school shootings are and what makes them happen 3.This article does a good job of talking about all of the elements that play a role in school shootings, this article was written to inform and not to persuade 4. All of the sources are mostly news articles that describe exactly what happened at those specific school shootings, the links do work and support what is written about the topic 5. Some of the information doesn't have the sources cited but the editor says "in article .... this was said" 6. I don't think anything is outdated all of the articles were written right after these shootings occurred. 7.Nobody has talked in the talk page it just says what kinds of things should be added 8. this page is not rated or part of a project 9. In our essays our sources had to be reliable and we had to talk about why they were reliable and how they related back to the topic in this article the authors just include information and say where they got it from.

edit

 * there were a few facts that did not have citations so to edit I'd remove those and find relevant sources to add and also cite
 * some people who edited used their own opinion but these are not facts and cannot be supported
 * it kind of just summarizes what school shootings are but not the specific ones and what happens.
 * I can also add ways that can help prevent shootings found by researchers and teachers and students who have actually survived shootings

what I will contribute with my sources
I was planning on using direct quotes from survivors from the recent shooting in Parkland to show the readers how it actually affects the students and why they think change should happen soon. If people knew the impact it had on the people involved perhaps they'd think twice about selling a fire arm to someone or actually paying attention to peoples mental health.I think their opinion is the most relevant because they were actually there and they know what its like to fear for their life because of a fire arm that was brought into their school.

drafting

 * the second paragraph includes stats about the motives behind these shootings but does not include, I might remove these and find an actual source with real statistics and cite my source
 * all of the examples have to do with the person individually and what they are going through at home I think I will add more about how gun suppliers should or already do background checks for these reasons. The only thing that was said about guns was that places where guns are not owned as much has less shootings, I will talk more about mental health awareness and how people should pay more attention to it
 * they have included responses from law enforcement officials as well as university students but not from the actual survivors from these shootings, there are many news articles where they have interviewed the students from the Florida highschool shooting so I will include what they have to say about it and the movement they have started (we call BS)
 * for the counter measures section I can also include the fact that Donald Trump wants to arm all teachers within their schools as well
 * i will also add a section about how we can reduce school shootings according to researchers and what teachers think about this.