User:Avengers2015/Water Conservation/Anoshah04 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Avengers2015


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Avengers2015/Water_Conservation?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Water conservation

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, I think your draft is great so far! You included relevant content, backed up by several sources and were able to write in a way that would be easy for the reader to understand. I really liked how you specifically included several ways that we can conserve water like by taking shorter showers and by watching how we use it in our yards and gardens. Some constructive criticism I have is that maybe you can help your second paragraph flow better by only keeping relevant information and using transition words to keep your paragraph organized. Also, maybe you can include a picture or two of the processes you listed in your second paragraph, so that the reader can really grasp what they are. Overall, nice job!