User:Avengers2015/Water Conservation/JR524 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Avengers2015


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Avengers2015/Water Conservation


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Water conservation

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback ls like.)

I thought that the edit contained some useful information that could benefit the article as a whole. The content is might be perceived as slightly in favor of water conservation, as the constant listing of strategies does become overwhelming. However, I do feel as if the writer should take into account the feasibility of some of these water conservation strategies such as composting toilets, as they are primarily are used in a low population setting. They really do not work with modern day urban areas where the majority of people live. Additionally, there were some composition errors such as "a a" and the writing was a little choppy and might be more suited to a list rather than a paragraph. Given the large amount of text as well, I would've liked to see some more sources. The idea is there and a lot of the content can be used. This is a great start to the edit!