User:AveryMcC/Brandy Melville/Shy63 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) : AveryMcC
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:AveryMcC/Brandy Melville

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

Yes, the lead has important information about Brandy Melville such as founders, origins and stores in the US.


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

Yes


 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?

Yes, the lead has the major information that people need to know about Brandy Melville.


 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

It is a good amount of details in the lead. However, you might be able to spread your information into a section such as History or store locations. I think it will be easier for readers to follow your information.

Lead evaluation
Over all they have a good amount of details, however, it was a little bit hard to read since it wasn't separated by categories.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

Yes, informative details related to the topic and a lot of references.


 * Is the content added up-to-date?

Yes


 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

I think the second to the last paragraph seems more bias since you use "I am expanding the article on the popular European clothing company, Brandy Melville." Thus, I think you might want to rephrase it to sound more neutral.

Content evaluation
Good contents, but this author might need to rephrase and make it more neutral tones.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?

Most parts are neutral and only second to the last paragraph is a little bit not neutral.


 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

I thought that the controversial topic about clothing size sounds more biased than neutrally giving the information.


 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

No, maybe the author could add more detail about branch stores.


 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

I don't think the author is trying to persuade the readers, but when this author talk about the clothing size controversial topic, it seemed trying to persuade.

Tone and balance evaluation
Over all really neutral and I think this author just need to rephrase some parts.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

Yes


 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?

Yes


 * Are the sources current?

Yes


 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?

Yes, there are many different articles/blogs posted by several different authors.


 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Most of them work for me, but the very top link didn't work for me, but I think I need to register to read the article.

Sources and references evaluation
Using a lot of articles to support the topics.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

It is well written and use a lot of secondary resources. I think if the author make categories to separate the paragraphs, it would be much easier for the readers to read.


 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

Not that I know of


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

I think this author needs to work on breaking down into sections.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?

No, this article needs images


 * Are images well-captioned?

N/A


 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?

N/A


 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

N/A

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?

Yes, I think the contents that were added into the article is a good topics to talk, but need some organizations and rephrasing.


 * What are the strengths of the content added?

Controversial topics, clothing size, is a good topic to add, but it could be hard to make it neutral.


 * How can the content added be improved?

Make is neutral tones and make sections.