User:AveryScott6/History of the Jews in Venice/Miam1026 Peer Review

General info
AveryScott6
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:AveryScott6/History of the Jews in Venice
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of the Jews in Venice:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I think the lead could maybe be updated to include a little more detail (for example look at other more developed wikipedia articles talking about jewish communities in other countries, or other marginalized groups within an area)

Content

In terms of content I think the new article "early history" is a great addition to the page. I noticed that there are only two sources cited in the entire section, so I would try to cite where the additional content came from.

I'd recommend adding a hyperlink to "Marranos", "the War of the League of Cambrai", and "moneylending" or at least explain it, because I had to look up what that was.

Tone and Balance

The article does a good job at keeping a neutral and formal tone. I didn't get a sense of being persuaded for one particular side, instead I got a very good overall view.

Organization

I think the way the article is organized (mostly chronological) makes a lot of sense, as it is starting with the early history. I think going from the beginning, where the first record of the Jewish came to Venice, all the way to the formation of the ghettos, makes the most sense.

References

Again, I only saw two references in the entire paragaph, and they are only in the first few sentences -- so I'd look into gathering more references that back up the information in the rest of the article.

New Article Considerations

I think that the article does a pretty good job at meeting the notability requirements!

Overall Impressions

I think the article is a great new addition to the page. Only suggestions are just adding those hyperlinks, and then maybe going back to the entire page and seeing where wording could be improved for clarity.