User:Avillalobostovar/Sex therapy/Amyaris Peer Review

Peer review
I would start with first explaining the problem, in this case GPPPD, and then get into the statistics of the problem. The paragraph is not too complex, but I feel it is a bit repetitive with the symptoms. The article provided does correlate to the data you presented in the paragraph.

The content is relevant to the topic and from what I see you might be adding it to the "Aging and Sexuality" heading in the Sex therapy article. The article is up to date since it's from 2018. I did not manage to find any Wikipedia's equity gaps.

The paragraph content is neutral and does not include any heavy bias towards a particular position.

You have a great source at your hands. I feel like you should try to find 1-2 more sources on the issue. Find an article involving deeper description of Genito-pelvic pain/penetration disorder (GPPPD), or try to find new gaps in the article and find new articles to fill those gaps. Since you are creating sub-heading for Therapy for Women, if you got enough time, you might be able to find articles about therapy for men. You could also update the small content portion on Alfred Kinsey due to his expansive research on human sexuality. Maybe there are articles discussing his contribution to the sex therapy? Overall each section seem to miss specific details. A lot of sentences added seem to be generalized. You have an opportunity to add content that is more cohesive and more statistically detailed, thus improving the overall article. Remember, make sure the content you will add to the Wikipedia article contains at minimum 5 cited articles.

The content of the paragraph is clear but I feel like the symptoms and certain words like "pain" and "vaginal penetration". There is not really else to say about the paragraph. I feel like you should look though the article and pick more point from it. The article mentions cognitive-behavioral therapy. The article has a lot more to tell about it. Include parts from "What does it look like" and "When Might Couple Therapy Be More Beneficial?". You could also discuss "Common Barriers and Issues" aspect. I feel like the paragraph could just involve more than what is introduced in the abstract and introduction sections.

Lastly, make sure to fix the date error in your citation. It seems there's "Check date values in:  " error that Wikipedia has detected. Click on (help) to manually edit the date so the article is cited correctly.

Hope this helps. Good luck!

--Aleks