User:Avkara/Proto-metabolism/Jssacks Peer Review

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Peer review of “Proto-metabolism” by user Ava Karanjia

Review by: Joshua Sacks

Lead:

·      Overall I think the lead is well written and does a good job of conveying the important information about the topic. The one thing I would add is some mention of the “metabolism-first” hypothesis.

·      I would also make sure there is one sentence that feels like a clear definition of proto-metabolism. It feels like you kind of circle the topic in the lead without ever concretely stating what proto-metabolism is.

Content:

·      I would maybe add a brief section comparing proto-metabolism to modern metabolism as well as links to some content on “metabolism”

·      In the section on HCN oligomerization I would mention that a lot of the HCN is through to be produced in the aftermath of a large impactors

·      The content is fairly comprehensive and up to date. However, I would make sure to include sufficient references to the importance of geochemistry and the geochemical context and plausibility in this work.

Tone and Balance:

·      The article does a very good job in representing the limitations and critiques of  the various theories presented in the article

·      The article does not appear to be biased and the content is generally neutral

Sources and References:

·      The article includes more than enough sources (39). However, most of the sources included are from peer reviewed journals as either primary literature or reviews published in scientific journals. I think the article would benefit from including more secondary sources such as news articles or reputable popular publications.

Organization:

·      The content is well written and clear.

·      I agree with the organization of the article

Images and Media:

·      No images are included in this article which is a reasonable choice given that the information is very difficult to visualize.

New Articles:

·      The article definitely meets Wikipedia’s notability requirements

·      The sources appear to be fairly comprehensive

·      The article includes sufficient information and plenty of links.

Overall Impressions:

·      A lot of the topics covered in your article are in part already covered in other pages. I would make sure to include enough new content specifically on proto-metabolisms so that it does not feel too similar what is already out there.

·      I think this is overall a really good article. Nice job!