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Samuel Noah Kramer

Incomplete education history

Could mention that he worked closely with Gordon under Montgomery

wrote his thesis on Nuzi tablets under Speiser (pg. 61)

was Clark professor of Assyriology

hosted a symposium in Mexico City in 1959 where he spoke on Sumer. His lectures were eventually formed into a book called "Mythologies of the Ancient World." (1961) (pg. 68)

Elle's edits for your article on Woooley:

I made a few small grammar edits (adding commas and things, should be visible on track changes but didn’t make any edits with substance).

Early Life: her father “was called” or “was”? ( If “was called” add “…[and was ] a Consul for Germany.”)

Red Cross: - when did this chapter of her life end? - I think every sentence without a citation here needs one

Excavation at ur:  - cite her role in restoring artifacts (at a few points its hard to tell if citations refer to the past several claims or not. There might be a way to suggest more continuity if that’s the case here and in the Red Cross section, or just Ibid everything).

Other Work: - maybe you could add where Alalakh and al-Mina are or their timeframe? - Could rephrase the second sentence here to make Woolley’s role less peripheral to her husband’s

Publications: - Could edit her novel to be about British mandate Iraq instead of “the Middle East”

Personal life: - Does her death go under personal life? (Unsure the wikipedia formatting) - I think wikipedia wants to know who has suggested things instead of “some” if you have that info about Keeling’s suicide

General Feedback: - Would refer to her by first + last name or last name only/Adding her name in more frequently might be helpful (but maybe this is not wikipedia biography standard?) - Transitions could be smoothed out to make a more cohesive story (but maybe that’s not a good goal for a biography). - Some sentences which have do do with people other than Katherine would probably be best as one sentence ie: “Most notably, she helped with the restoration of Queen Puabi’s headdress.[3] Queen Puabi’s headdress was one of the most opulent findings and has proved crucial to understanding royal life in ancient Mesopotamia. It now resides in the Penn Museum.” —> Most notably, Woolley helped with the restoration of Queen Puabi’s headdress, a particularly opulent find which now resides in the Penn Museum and provides crucial insight into ancient Mesopotamian royal life. - Tone of the piece seems mostly impartial. I think you could take out “famed” (Wooley) “important” (Illustrated London News) which don’t add too much but might appear skewed

- I think separating out her personal life from her career is successful if unforchunate that the encyclopedic form makes us cut up peoples lives ( and it’s a little weird to talk about her husband’s sudden death and then find our more details later) but all in all I think it makes sense and is well divided.

- I’m not sure that your second source (http://bjrichards.blogspot.com/2013/01/more-deadly-than-male-life-of-katharine_4954.html) will clear wikipedia standards as it’s not affiliated with the British museum/ seems like one woman’s personal blog; the blog post references a lecture at the British museum on Woolley that looks like the source of this material so hopefully that’s accessible somewhere

- Overall, this paints a pretty full seeming picture of Woolley— I think it’s really well balanced and shouldn’t face too much wikipedia flack