User:AwaltonUW/Environmental impact of the 2022 Russian invasion of Ukraine/Carter McCrae Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AwaltonUW


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AwaltonUW/Environmental_impact_of_the_2022_Russian_invasion_of_Ukraine?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 2022 Russian invasion of Ukraine

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, I think its really well written and doesn't need too drastic of changes. I like your pictures and your descriptions for them; they're were very detailed. Neutrality was very good and everything was backed up by strong sources.

As for what could be done better, There isn't really a lead for your section of the article, you just jump right into it which I'm not sure matters too much but if there is any context you can give or find to your aspects that would be beneficial. additionally some grammatical changes are necessary; there's a few missed commas that could help improve the readability and I found this to be a sentence fragment: '''"With a reportedly 70 out of 94 mines in Donbas under separatist control[5], its impossible to know if they are being maintained at proper standards." , " to a point that" change this "a" to "the", " contaminating vital environmentally components like groundwater" change "environmentally" to "environmental" and lastly, "which in turn increases"''', for more clarity when reading, change that whole thing to just "increasing".