User:Awesomeaxolotl/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Huda Sha'arawi

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article because in class we read some of Sha'arawi's speeches in order to familiarized ourselves with Arabic and Middle Eastern feminism. Having had a large impact on the progress of Egyptian feminism, Sha'arawi is deserving of an article, although the article was at times poorly formatted or worded.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section


 * Although the lead section is only one sentence, it provides a thorough (albeit brief) overview of the topic. It introduces Huda Sha'arawi, the dates of her birth and death, and identifies her as an Egyptian feminist.

Content


 * While the content is largely relevant, there are both sections that provide unnecessary detail and missing gaps of information. An entire subsection is dedicated to her meeting with Atatürk, the Turkish leader. The majority of this section is comprised of a lengthy quote from her memoir detailing the meeting. This section could likely be condensed into one sentence placed in the feminism subsection. Some information is repeated twice in different subsections. The article is also entirely missing any information on Sha'arawi's later life and death. This article does deal with a subject in a historically oppressed population and most of the content centers around this fact.

Tone and Balance


 * The article's tone does not feel entirely neutral. Some claims seem to overstate Sha'arawi's impact, as well as utilize language that leans towards opinion rather than a deliverance of fact. It's hard to tell if the article is attempt to persuade me of her importance, or if her work was truly that important (although I believe it is more so the latter).

Sources and References


 * Sha'arawi's own memoir is heavily referenced regarding information of her personal life and upbringing. Multiple scholarly articles and books are referenced, both that detail Sha'arawi in specific or just the larger Egyptian feminist movement. Sources are largely in English, although there are a couple Arabic sources. I found one link to an article that was removed, so I can no longer access it. This should be updated. There is a substantial section that is only cited to a Youtube video from an unacademic source. This should be removed.

Organization and Writing Quality


 * This article was clearly written by multiple authors with different writing skills levels. While some portions, like those covering her early life and marriage and nationalism, are well written and organized, most other sections have grammatical errors or are written out of chronology. Grammatical editing should be done.

Images and Media


 * Only two images of her both with and without a mantle. The captions are accurate but could be improved by providing the time both pictures were take. They are placed in an aesthetically pleasing way. Both are cited to the poor YouTube source, so I doubt they follow copyright laws.

Talk Page Discussion


 * There was one conversation in which an editor raised the issue of poor sourcing and biased tone, but was immediately shut down by another editor, who threatened to report the first editor if any edits were made. Not the most productive space. The article is rated a C-class and is relevant to WikiProjects on Biographies, Egypt, Feminism, and Women's History.

Overall Impressions


 * I feel that the C rating is appropriate for this article. While it is developed and contains a fair bit of information about the subject, editing is needed to fill content gaps, fix organizational and grammatical errors, and amend poor sourcing. The article's strengths fall in the sections referring to her early life, nationalism, and feminism.