User:Awesomeaxolotl/Pearl Sherrod/BreVermilion Peer Review

General info
Awesomeaxolotl
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Awesomeaxolotl/Pearl Sherrod
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):User:Awesomeaxolotl/Pearl Sherrod

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Some main things that could be changed to make the article better are listed below:


 * Include "a brief description of the article's major sections" in the lead of the article.
 * add some basic information about pearl, like her birthday in the lead but leave her birthplace for later on in the article
 * try to add things to the lead that would make it clear how Pearl is important. it should be a brief captivating section that would make the readers want to read the rest of it.

Main questions from reading the article:


 * What year was Sherrod born? Throughout the article it has her involvement from 1920s-30s but states "Born in Alabama in 1986."

Overall thoughts on the content:


 * The tone of the article does appear to be neutral
 * It is also very detailed and contains a lot of good information.
 * all of the sources that were included in the page seen reliable. with one that can be double checked. That people the source from In These Times, but other then that everything else is good.

Small edits that could be made to make the article better (not important ones that necessarily need to be followed):


 * In the line "The couple had three children: Vernell Sarah Sherrod, born in 1910; Jimmilee Sherrod, born in 1914; and Emerson Sherrod, born in 1913." - It would be better to switch Emerson and Jimmilee to have a chronological order for the years that the children were born.
 * think about adding an image of the person or the movements that she was involved in.