User:Awesomeaxolotl/Pearl Sherrod/Happyduck101 Peer Review

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Awesomeaxolotl
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I think you have a great first sentence that does a good job of describing the article's topic and getting straight to the point. However, if you guys incorporate the major sections that your group will be delving into, the lead will be, in my opinion, better and stronger.

Content

Everything you said was relevant to the topic and, to my knowledge, is up to date. Two things that I noticed in the early life section that I wanted to highlight were that you said she was born in 1986, but all of her accomplishments were prior to that. I just checked one of the sources and it says she was born in 1896. Furthermore, I am not entirely sure if there is information about her childhood, like her parents and siblings, but some of that information could be relevant for an early life section. Also, in that section, you talk about what inspired her to activism, which may be better placed in the activism section. In some places you guys seem unsure of, I think that may be an area to do some further research on to see if you can find something.

Guiding questions:

Tone and Balance

When I was reading this, I thought this was just a great unbiased biography that just talked about the facts that occurred in her life.

Guiding questions:

Looking at the sources, they are all done by major authors or are published by major universities. I noticed that one of your sources was cited twice. The sources that you use are all great sources that are accurate and current and are definitely the most reliable and informative sources. I looked around for other sources, and the most reliable and informative ones are the ones you have already. Based on my skim of the sources, you guys seem to put the information accurately. I found one source from a PHD student’s thesis that talks about some of her contributions that may help.

https://etd.ohiolink.edu/acprod/odb_etd/ws/send_file/send?accession=oberlin16256964160838&disposition=inline

Writing and structure:

Overall, great writing! While there are some typos present, those are easy fixes. I like the format that you guys have with appropriate and relevant headings.

Other remarks

Your article does meet the nobility requirements, and it represents, in my opinion, the best sources available on this topic, and has a similar structure to other similar Wikipedia articles.

I would recommend linking key topics to make your article more discoverable. For example, Sherrod’s husband, Satokato Takahashi, is a great example of someone to hyperlink since he has a Wikipedia page, and Sherrod is mentioned on Takahsashi’s page as well.

Overall I like where this is going!