User:Awr2727/Geobacter daltonii/Vandelay Industries Biologist Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vandelay Industries Biologist


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Awr2727/Geobacter_daltonii?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Geobacter daltonii

Evaluate the drafted changes
There are two sentences in the sandbox draft of the Geobacter daltonii article I am supposed to be reviewing, but I believe the author already published their finished wiki article. So I will review the actual published article.

The lead of the article provides a quality overview of the organisms characteristics and where it has been located. However, I believe it might be too specific when describing the location the organism is found. If Oak Ridge, TN is the only place this organism has been isolated then that should also be stated. The final suggestion for the lead section is that the location is mentioned only in the lead section and not in the article body.

For the overall content of the article it is made up of 3 sentences. The element names of Iron (III) and Uranium (IV) should be added instead of the atomic abbreviations. Color of colonies and cell shape could be added to increase the detail of the article. These two qualities were mentioned in one of the sources listed in the bibliography. I do like how the implications of the bacteria's behavior and metabolic abilities are mentioned to give the reader an idea of societal uses and impacts the organism can have.

The tone and balance of this article is exactly as it should be, neutral. The information is presented in a sentenced format with now personal tendencies or bias.

The sources are fairly recent considering the obscurity of the organism of interest. Some sources are thorough and others are taxonomical databases. I believe there can be more information extracted from the sources, but there is a good start in the article so far.

Since the article is relatively short and concise I believe it does a solid job of conveying the relevant information. The organization is not complex because there is not an abundant amount of information on the subject which is understandable.

Overall, the article written conveys all of the necessary information for an obscure microbe that may not be that prevalent in society or the ecosystem. However, through further inspection of the sources listed there are bits of information that should be added to the wiki article to improve the overall synthesis of information. Since this is a first draft these additions can be made and the article is very close to being publishable.