User:Axlra/Mount Willey/Ldw15 Peer Review

General info
Axlra
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Axlra/Mount Willey
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Mount Willey

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

In your case, the lead was kept the same as the initial article. The division of information into sections was useful for organization. However, I don't believe you need a "lead" header. The lead's first sentence introduces the article appropriately. The added sections of "Connected Trails" and "Mount Willey Trail" aren't mentioned in the lead, so that might be something worth noting briefly. The lead also includes a large amount of information, maybe consider moving some information from the lead to a new section and mentioning that information in the lead more concisely.

Content:

The content added is relevant to the topic and up to date. There does not seem to be content missing or content that does not belong.

Tone and Balance:

The content added is neutral as you state only facts. There does not seem to be any bias.

Sources and References:

More of the new information provided should have citations attached to them when the information is obtained through a source, especially since you only have one citation per paragraph. Content does reflect what information sources provide and seem to be thorough. The sources are current based on the dates provided, and the links do work.

Organization:

I think your article is relatively well organized, however, it might benefit from some of the information in the lead section being moved to a new section. I did not notice any grammatical or spelling errors. The content is well written as it is very clear and concise.

Images and Media:

No images were added, but there doesn't appear to be a need for this either.

Overall Impressions:

The content you added definitely improved the article, it is now more complete and has more useful information about the topic. The content is informative about trails for recreation purposes, which is likely a primary reason people access this page. The content could be improved by creating a new section for history using the information in the lead, making the lead more concise, and adding citations when appropriate.