User:Axolotl61/Mental disorders and gender/Lm1403 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jk2040, Alannacronk, Mk1925


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Axolotl61/Mental_disorders_and_gender?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mental disorders and gender

Evaluate the drafted changes
Given that you guys had a long article, I think you did really well to refine it and also contribute new information. I think it was a good choice to remove the "Causes of intimate partner violence" section since this speaks in a generalising way. I particularly like your work on the "Social Media Pressures and Criticism" section, it now reads as more precise. Throughout your additions, you write in a factual, concise way, which complements the neutrality of a wikipedia article. I wonder whether you could streamline the article by somehow combining sections 2.4 and and 5.4 since they both pertain to social media and its impacts on mental health.~