User:Axolotl61/Mental disorders and gender/TakeYourMarks Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Axolotl61


 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Axolotl61/Mental_disorders_and_gender?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mental_disorders_and_gender#:~:text=Gender%20is%20correlated%20with%20the,abuse%20and%20antisocial%20personality%20disorder.
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mental_disorders_and_gender#:~:text=Gender%20is%20correlated%20with%20the,abuse%20and%20antisocial%20personality%20disorder.

Evaluate the drafted changes
The use of "females" instead of "women" and "males" instead of "men" under the Anxiety section was distracting, since female and male refer to an individual's sex and woman and man refers to an individual's gender. The sentence "Females are also twice as likely to develop specific phobias" needed to link phobias to anxiety. I would also note that OCD is a type of anxiety disorder.

Within the Depression section, there is an unnecessary comma after major depressive disorder. It's really interesting that the increased rate of depression in women is because of social factors. Is there a reason why more men die from suicide than women?

I didn't know that men also experience postpartum depression.

Under Gender Bias in Medicine, are there any efforts to evenly distribute depression diagnoses among women and men, or any practices practitioners may observe to be less biased?

I was surprised that under the section Masculine Bias in Medicine, I read about hysteria in women.

Under Intimate Partner Violence, I found your addition of the study to be very pertinent.

Under Social Media Pressures and Criticism, your additions worked very well, but I recommend sticking to "boys" and "girls" instead of boys and "women" since you are talking about adolescents and to be consistent.

Well done!