User:Ayaide/Nintendo thumb/Asayena Peer Review

August 1, 2022

1.    ALL group members should respond to the following prompts (EVERY person in the group should respond to BOTH questions for this part), with specific examples:

·       Persons A, B, C and D: Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?

The article "Nintendo thumb" is organized in a manner that aligns to the guiding framework of Wikipedia because it includes an easy to read leading section, clear structure, balanced coverage, contains neutral content, and provides reliable sources. The leading section contains the background information of what the topic is about so that readers have a better understanding of what is going to be discussed in the article. The contents are divided into a clear structure by the generalization of the topic of Nintendo thumb and how it came to be, and then specializes into more specific case reports. The group improved the article substantially by providing supporting case reports for the readers and clarifying relevance of the topic.

·       Persons A, B, C and D: Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?

This group seems to have achieved a proficient understanding of their topic and have exhausted their resources on such a specific topic nonetheless. I think that they went a good route in including specific case reports so that I can envision what Nintendo thumb is all about.

2.    Each group should divide up the prompts below so that a different person responds to each question (one person per question for this part). Please sign your comments with your name and account name so that you receive credit.

·         Person A: Does the draft submission reflect a neutral point of view? (explain) Sharyse

·         Person B: Are the points included verifiable with cited secondary sources that are freely available? (explain) Josh

·         Person C. Are the edits formatted consistent with Wikipedia’s manual of style? (explain) Nicholas

·       Person: D: Do the edits reflect language that supports diversity, equity, and inclusion? (explain) Asa

The edits are inclusive in regards to incorporating a variety of age and genders, such as a "38 year old man" or "44 year old woman". However, I think we should edit the language to reflect saying terms like "male and female" instead of "man and woman".

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Nintendo thumb


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)