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 * Name of article: (link ) Technological determinism
 * I chose this article because I am interested in evaluating more on how affects society as a whole, in how it evolves the culture and dynamic of the people. There is a lot of research that can be put into this topic and it's very interesting in reading up about the evaluations.

Lead
The introduction clearly states what the article is about, which is technological determinism. It opens up about where it is originated from and names a radical determinist, Karl Marx. The Lead includes a statement that there are multiple forms of technological determinism, however it mostly talks about Karl Marx. The Lead does, however include brief statements that allude to the article's main sections, but not about the criticism as that is one of the sections. Overall, the Lead is a relatively good intoduction to the article, maybe can use some tweaks here and there to make it more concrete and strong.

Content
The article's content is relevat to the topic, explaining the soft and hard determinism and how media plays into it. It goes into the origin and contributors to technological determinism and the reactions to it. The content seems to be relatively up to date, and it is seems in the Talk section people critiquing and adding to the article a couple years back.

Tone and Balance
The article has a neutral tone, simply stating factual information and not trying to sway the ready one way or another. Simply talks about the origins, different types of technological determinism and what famous determinists have said about it while still giving a section to the criticism.

Sources and References
The facts in the article is backed up by substantial references to books, which have relevance to the topic. However, the external links refer to college websites. One of the links is out of date. This article could use some update in that regard.

Organization
The article does have some grammar mistakes, could use a few commas and some sentences can be reconstructed to be stronger. However, the article is relatively easy to read and follow along. The article could use more breaking up, like some more smaller paragraphs rather than huge ones. The article does well in the major sections and breaking it up to reflect the main points of technological determinism.

Images and Media
The article does not include images to enhance the understanding of the topic. The article could do well with some images scattered around, maybe images of the mentioned determinists. However, the article does include a lot of references on the bottom so that looking further into the information is possible for evaluation.

Checking the talk page
In the talk page, people just talked about expanding a few sections and criticising the citations. However, it appears some of the people have added information. The article is part of a few WikiProjects such as History of Science, Philosophy, Technology, and Sociology. It seems to be rated in the C-Class overall.

Overall impressions
The article definitely shows strength in covering a good amount of major points that has relevance to technological determinism. It names some determinists, talks about the opposing view, talks about the origins and the stirrups that it has caused. The article can definitely be improved by cleaning up the grammar and some structure in the paragraphs and sentences.I would assess in the article's completeness as moderately developed; not quite poor but not exceptional.

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