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 * Name of article: (link )Technological determinism
 * I chose this article because I am interested in evaluating more on how affects society as a whole, in how it evolves the culture and dynamic of the people. There is a lot of research that can be put into this topic and it's very interesting in reading up about the evaluations.

Lead
The introduction clearly states what the article is about, which is technological determinism. It opens up about where it is originated from and names a radical determinist, Karl Marx. The Lead includes a statement that there are multiple forms of technological determinism, however it mostly talks about Karl Marx. The Lead does, however include brief statements that allude to the article's main sections, but not about the criticism as that is one of the sections. Overall, the Lead is a relatively good intoduction to the article, maybe can use some tweaks here and there to make it more concrete and strong.

Content
The article's content is relevant to the topic, explaining the soft and hard determinism and how media plays into it. It goes into the origin and contributors to technological determinism and the reactions to it. The content seems to be relatively up to date, and it is seems in the Talk section people critiquing and adding to the article a couple years back.

Tone and Balance
The article has a neutral tone, simply stating factual information and not trying to sway the ready one way or another. Simply talks about the origins, different types of technological determinism and what famous determinists have said about it while still giving a section to the criticism.

Sources and References
The facts in the article is backed up by substantial references to books, which have relevance to the topic. However, the external links refer to college websites. One of the links is out of date. This article could use some update in that regard.

Organization
The article does have some grammar mistakes, could use a few commas and some sentences can be reconstructed to be stronger. However, the article is relatively easy to read and follow along. The article could use more breaking up, like some more smaller paragraphs rather than huge ones. The article does well in the major sections and breaking it up to reflect the main points of technological determinism.

Images and Media
The article does not include images to enhance the understanding of the topic. The article could do well with some images scattered around, maybe images of the mentioned determinists. However, the article does include a lot of references on the bottom so that looking further into the information is possible for evaluation.

Checking the talk page
In the talk page, people just talked about expanding a few sections and criticising the citations. However, it appears some of the people have added information. The article is part of a few WikiProjects such as History of Science, Philosophy, Technology, and Sociology. It seems to be rated in the C-Class overall.

Overall impressions
The article definitely shows strength in covering a good amount of major points that has relevance to technological determinism. It names some determinists, talks about the opposing view, talks about the origins and the stirrups that it has caused. The article can definitely be improved by cleaning up the grammar and some structure in the paragraphs and sentences.I would assess in the article's completeness as moderately developed; not quite poor but not exceptional.

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Option 1

 * Article title: Ethics of Technology
 * Article Evaluation: :Overall, this article touches on a lot of main points involving technoethics, however there are some citations that are needed in some of the generalised portions. Also would be interesting to expand more on the Cybercriminality section.
 * Sources: Ethics of technology

Option 2

 * Article title: Ethics of Artificial Intelligence
 * Article Evaluation :
 * This article does seem to talk a wide variety of sub-topics regarding the uses of AI and the ethical side of it. The talk page has a good amount of users editing and commenting, so has good traffic. There could be a good amount added regarding more fields in the AI field and how it would impact the world and what it would mean for humanity.


 * Sources : Ethics of Artificial Intelligence

Option 3

 * Article title: : Existential Risk From Artificial General Intelligence
 * Article Evaluation :
 * The controversial side could have included a couple more sources, especially from more reliable people that have more of an education in technology and can come to a more accurate analysis about Artificial General Intelligence. There are a lot of sections to this article. This article is also rated level-5 vita article in Technology, and is C-class. The article is interesting, however, like it is mentioned also in the Talk page, it reads a bit more like a media article and it is not so neutral in tone. Definitely can be improved in the balance of tone and better sources.


 * Sources : Existential risk from artificial general intelligence
 * Option 4
 * Article title: Technological Singularity
 * Article Evaluation :
 * The Talk page is not very active, but does have quite a few edits including citation edits. The article itself talks about the possibility of computers and other technologies become more intelligent than humans; this topic is extremely curious. The article seems to be good with the controversial part as well, so relatively well balanced.
 * The Talk page is not very active, but does have quite a few edits including citation edits. The article itself talks about the possibility of computers and other technologies become more intelligent than humans; this topic is extremely curious. The article seems to be good with the controversial part as well, so relatively well balanced.


 * Sources : Technological singularity
 * Option 5
 * Article title: Artificial General Intelligence
 *  Article Evaluation : 
 * There is high activity in the Talk page of this article, some controversy seemingly about the term coined. However it is a very interesting topic and seems to cover a bit of the science fiction side of it in this article, and comparing to the human brain. The mention of emotions and AI is very intriguing.
 * There is high activity in the Talk page of this article, some controversy seemingly about the term coined. However it is a very interesting topic and seems to cover a bit of the science fiction side of it in this article, and comparing to the human brain. The mention of emotions and AI is very intriguing.


 * Sources : Artificial general intelligence

assignment 5
Added citation to Technological singularity, in section Intelligence Explosion:

In accordance to Frank S. Robinson, graduate of NYU Law school and author of four books, one being about machine politics, in his article 'The Human Future' he mentions that computers will be able to improve further by their own will and eventually the advancement would "go into warp speed". They will globally link into a super brain, if you will, and eventually dwarf what humans offer.

assignment 6
Adding to article to Technological singularity:

Intelligence Explosion and the Effects
We are not yet close to inventing a machine that is as smart as the human mind, however, with the rate we are going with inventions and improvements, it is just a matter of time before we do. When we reach that threshold, there will come a time where the computers will take over their own improvement and everything will just go into warp speed. This is what Frank S. Robinson, graduate of NYU Law school and author of four books, one being about machine politics, talks about in his work “The Human Future”; that once we humans achieve a machine with the intelligence of a human, scientific and technological problems will be tackled and solved with brainpower far superior to ours. He also makes a point that artificial systems are able to share data, like sharing minds, and with this explosion of intelligence it will be a global network of super-intelligence that will dwarf human capability.

As of now, teleportation is near impossible. However, with intelligence far more complex and evolved than the human brain of today will be able to solve such a concept—with tools such as nanotechnology or atomically precise manufacturing. With this, who is to say it’s not possible to integrate nanotech into our very own bodies? Robinson goes on to also talk about how vastly different the future will have the potential to look after this intelligence explosion. One example of this can be solar energy, where the sun beats down on us with energy ten thousand times our current usage; so, capturing more of that solar energy holds vast promise for a revolution our energy industry.

If this intelligence explosion really is inevitably the future, one has to wonder what would that make the human brain in comparison? Would we be the more primitive version and the machine the replacement or upgrade ? The human brain is complex, with parallel thinking and multiprocessing, and so with artificial intelligence (AI) gaining more and more complexity and improvement, it is not impossible to think that artificial systems can reach the sophistication of the human mind that can create the self. Thus, it is probable that AI can attain an even higher form of consciousness than humans at some point.

With this explosion of intelligence, there is the question of how this will affect humans as machines continue to do everything just as well if not better than humans. James Blodgett, who wrote “Making the Difference: Finding Wise Choices at the Cusp of a Singularity” among other pieces and works in singularity management, poses the question of that if robots can do everything that humans can, what would that mean for jobs in the future? Blodgett also makes a point of that potential benefits exceed potential losses is often true, however it is hard to truly compare the actual outcome because future outcomes can only be estimated approximately.

Ray Kurzweil, futurist author and Google’s director of engineering, sees technological singularity coming in the next few decades where technological advancement so profound that changes human life and is a discontinuity rom what was before. Intelligence explosion isn’t a matter of if but rather of when.

Peer Review Assignment 7 Completed
Ayalah peer reviewed juanmendez76's article

Assignment 9 completed
I did not receive any feedback, however I wanted to make slight change in the beginning paragraph to make it flow a little more:

We, as a people, are not yet close to inventing a machine that is as smart or complex as the human mind. However, with the rate we are going with inventions and improvements, it is just a matter of time before we do. With this would come the idea of an intelligence explosion where, when we reach a certain threshold, there will come a time where the computers will take over their own improvement and everything will just go into warp speed. This is what Frank S. Robinson, graduate of NYU Law school and author of four books, one being about machine politics, talks about in his work “The Human Future”. He discusses that once we humans achieve a machine with the intelligence of a human, scientific and technological problems will be tackled and solved with brainpower far superior to ours. He also makes a point that artificial systems are able to share data, like sharing minds, and with this explosion of intelligence it will be a global network of super-intelligence that will dwarf human capability.

Assignment 10 completed
Moved my section on Intelligence Explosion on the article Technological Singularity's mainspace with an edit summary saying what I did and linked my sandbox.

Assignment 11 completed
Below is an improved version of what I originally moved to my chosen article, Technological Singularity. I took out any personal indications such as 'we', 'I', 'us', and got rid of rhetorical questions to give it less of an essay-feel and more article-like. I received this criticism from a fellow wikipedia editor.

Humans are not yet close to inventing a machine that is as smart or complex as the human mind, as currently noted in the science community. However, with the rate society is progressing with inventions and improvements, it is just a matter of time before it is achieved. With this would come the idea of an intelligence explosion where, when society reaches a certain threshold, there will come a time where the computers will take over their own improvement and everything will just go into warp speed. This is what Frank S. Robinson, graduate of NYU Law school and author of four books, one being about machine politics, talks about in his work “The Human Future”. He discusses that once humans achieve a machine with the intelligence of a human, scientific and technological problems will be tackled and solved with brainpower far superior to humans. He also makes a point that artificial systems are able to share data, like sharing minds, and with this explosion of intelligence it will be a global network of super-intelligence that will dwarf human capability.

As of now, teleportation is near impossible. However, with intelligence far more complex and evolved than the human brain of today will be able to solve such a concept—with tools such as nanotechnology or atomically precise manufacturing. With this, who is to say it’s not possible to integrate nanotech into the bodies themselves? Robinson goes on to also talk about how vastly different the future will have the potential to look after this intelligence explosion. One example of this can be solar energy, where the sun beats down on with energy ten thousand times our current usage; so, capturing more of that solar energy holds vast promise for a revolution our energy industry.

If this intelligence explosion really is inevitably the future, it's a wonder what would that make the human brain in comparison. Perhaps we be the more primitive version and the machine the replacement or upgrade. The human brain is complex, with parallel thinking and multiprocessing, and so with artificial intelligence (AI) gaining more and more complexity and improvement, it is not impossible to think that artificial systems can reach the sophistication of the human mind that can create the self. Thus, it is probable that AI can attain an even higher form of consciousness than humans at some point.

With this explosion of intelligence, there is the question of how this will affect humans as machines continue to do everything just as well if not better than humans. James Blodgett, who wrote “Making the Difference: Finding Wise Choices at the Cusp of a Singularity” among other pieces and works in singularity management, poses the question of that if robots can do everything that humans can, what would that mean for jobs in the future. Blodgett also makes a point of that potential benefits exceed potential losses is often true, however it is hard to truly compare the actual outcome because future outcomes can only be estimated approximately.

Ray Kurzweil, futurist author and Google’s director of engineering, sees technological singularity coming in the next few decades where technological advancement so profound that changes human life and is a discontinuity rom what was before. Intelligence explosion isn’t a matter of if but rather of when it seems, as according to Kurzweil and Robinson.

Assignment 13 completed
Below I just polished up the work I did, trying to eliminate any question and make it as simple, straightforward, and neutral as possible:

The science community notes that humans are not yet close, as of now, to inventing a machine that is as smart or complex as the human mind. However, it is just a matter of time of when that would be achieved, with the rate society is progressing with inventions and improvements. With this, an intelligence explosion could occur when society reaches a certain threshold; a time where the computers will take over their own improvement and everything will just go into warp speed. This is what Frank S. Robinson, graduate of NYU Law school and author of four books, one being about machine politics, talks about in his work “The Human Future”. He discusses that once humans achieve a machine with the intelligence of a human, scientific and technological problems will be tackled and solved with brainpower far superior to humans. He also makes a point that artificial systems are able to share data, like sharing minds, and with this explosion of intelligence it will be a global network of super-intelligence that will dwarf human capability.

As of now, teleportation is near impossible. However, with intelligence far more complex and evolved than the human brain of today will be able to solve such a concept—with tools such as nanotechnology or atomically precise manufacturing. With this, it’s possible in the future to integrate nanotech into the bodies themselves. Robinson also talks about how vastly different the future will have the potential to look after this intelligence explosion. One example of this can be solar energy, where the sun beats down on with energy ten thousand times our current usage; so, capturing more of that solar energy holds vast promise for a revolution our energy industry.

If this intelligence explosion really is inevitably the future, it's a wonder what would that make the human brain in comparison. The humans may be then a more primitive version and the machine the replacement or upgrade. The human brain is complex, with parallel thinking and multiprocessing, and so with artificial intelligence (AI) gaining more and more complexity and improvement, it is not impossible to think that artificial systems can reach the sophistication of the human mind that can create the self. Thus, it is probable that AI can attain an even higher form of consciousness than humans at some point.

With this explosion of intelligence, there is the discussion of how this will affect humans as machines continue to do everything just as well if not better than humans. James Blodgett, who wrote “Making the Difference: Finding Wise Choices at the Cusp of a Singularity” among other pieces and works in singularity management, poses the question of that if robots can do everything that humans can, what would that mean for jobs in the future. Blodgett also makes a point of that potential benefits exceed potential losses is often true, however it is hard to truly compare the actual outcome because future outcomes can only be estimated approximately.

Ray Kurzweil, futurist author and Google’s director of engineering, sees technological singularity coming in the next few decades where technological advancement so profound that changes human life and is a discontinuity rom what was before. Intelligence explosion isn’t a matter of if but rather of when it seems, as according to Kurzweil and Robinson.

Assignment 14 completed
I have already finished polishing my work in the previous assignment to the best of my ability in regards to the guidelines and submitted it onto the the article page itself.

Reflective essay
I learned aplenty about Wikipedia during the article evaluation process; this includes learning which articles have substance and a neutral, unbiased tone. To properly critique my article of choice, Technological Singularity, I took into account the sources used for the research, the talk page based on what people have said on there, and what the article itself has written (if it has an agenda or just being informative). I decided for this article to expand on the Intelligence Explosion section, for it was not very informative and could see the potential it has--plus, it really interested me.

All in all, I did decide to expand on the Intelligence Explosion section, bringing in more information on the potential of machines gaining intelligence at such an accelerated pace that humans would not be able to keep up. I felt my addition added to the value of the article because it went deeper into the possibility of machines becoming superior than the human mind, and how that could impact us and how that can happen in the first place.

Unfortunately, I did not recieve a peer review, but I did get a few pointers from a fellow Wikipedia contributer to change my tone in my original work to be less personable; I had words such as "I", "we", and the like. That helped me immensely to give my piece more of an article, straight to the point tone than an essay feel.

Ultimately, I can take a great deal of experience and lessons from this whole semester project. I've learned more about researching and distinguishing what is accurate and not. Also, I have a better understanding of the difference between an essay format and an article/informative format. This Wikipedia assignment is different than my other assignments from the past in the sense that this also went more in depth in learning to critique articles and to expand on work already dont by others--I have never completed an assignment quite like that, I have always had to purely work on work start to finish. Wikipedia can help with public understanding of my topic with just putting the information out there, and tagging the article in other articles where it has a connection--this is important because it opens doors to new information that people otherwise would not have thought of expanding on.