User:Ayoung22/Single's Inferno/Jinie Ham Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ayoung22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ayoung22/Single%27s_Inferno?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Single's Inferno

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead been updated to reflect the new content which describes the concepts of the show. Added information provides insights of the shows to the readers. But on the Lead, I think adding a introduction of the further categories on the bottom so that the readers could expect what kinds of information they are getting. Such as "this article will be introduce the personal information about the participants". Also the part where you mentioned "participants are left on an island and the mission is to leave it"- In my opinion, expand and add more information of that concept will be more helpful for reader to understand. Since the concept of Single's Inferno is the couples needs to be matched on the last day of island in order to escape the island- I think you can rephrase that sentence like "Participants are left on an deserted island to find their love and the rule is only the final matching couple could escape the island". On top of this, add more information / rules of this show. Explain about the rules of going to Paradise, mini games they played to win the ticket to going to Paradise or earn the opportunities to having a nice meal with the person they feel attracted and how many days they are staying in deserted island. Adding more categories on the body part explains of more fun facts that was inside of the show. As a reader who is also a big fan of this show, reading more detailed information about the show would make this article sounds more informative, and interesting- even to the reader who doesn't know this show at all.

overall, the article has very interesting topic. It was interested to read about Single's Inferno on Wikipedia article.