User:BC604/Golden Ears Provincial Park/Daphnembh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BC604, Ishaan155, Maggiecross13, Mca278, Rainsoaked33


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BC604/Golden_Ears_Provincial_Park?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The introductory paragraph being the earliest inhabitants of Golden ears provincial park is a great way to catch the readers attention and it includes content that is unique to the article.It does lack the introductory required for the rest of the characteristics of the park that will be discussed and does not really give an overview if what will be covered. Regardless, a very catchy lead.

Content

The content in this draft greatly contains the significant qualities of Golden ears, i.e species, management plans, First Nations territory and its traditional and current uses. While the original article contains mostly information about tourist attractions and activities, the information here highlights what makes Golden ears what it is. It also presents underrepresented topics such as First Nations insolvent in the management plan and its traditional use. Overall, the content is diverse and relevant.

Tone and Balance

This draft is quite heavy on the topic of plant species and contains little information on the animal species that inhabit Golden Ears.

Sources and references

Most of the references listed in this draft comes from government and university sources. While underrepresented information about First Nations involvement, it does not specifically include the voices / perspectives of historically marginalized individuals; just government and university sources which is still valid. Sources however are limited to governmental and academic sites, however, and not many peered-reviewed scientific articles. Reference link 2 doesn’t seem to work as well.

Organization & Media

The heading ‘species at risk’ could have been included before vegetation and the management plan could have ended the article quite nicely. Overall I believe it is good to categorize and put all flaura and fauna information under one significant subheading and so reading the management plan after knowledge about its species has a better flow. Overall, i have detected so grammatical errors and everything else is quite easy to understand and read.

The Media on this draft represents said species quite nicely and really add a pleasant aesthetic to the article. A few more on the animal species and it would be perfect. Images also contain the name of the plant and is organized beside its respective paragraphs correlating to the information and topic.

Overall Impressions:

I’m quite impressed at the level of detail and diversity of topics included in this draft at a very concise manner. It greatly highlights the foundation of Golden Ears Provincial park such as its species, history and management plans and its current significance to us other than its outdoor activities for humans. As I’ve previously mentioned above, some organization regarding the headings and more information about animal species and its interaction within the topography / other species would greatly enhance this article.