User:BC604/Golden Ears Provincial Park/RubenaTuesday Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BC604, Rainsoaked33, Mca278, Maggiecross13, Ishaan155


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BC604/Golden_Ears_Provincial_Park?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Golden Ears Provincial Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
Currently there is no lead paragraph to evaluate. When you write one, make sure to include all the major points of the article.

The Park Management Plan section can be moved towards the beginning. The First Nations section connects to the Creation and First Habitants sections, so those two can be placed closer together. The Species at Risk section could be closer to the Vegetation section, since they both discuss the living features of the park.

There is repeated information from the original article in the Creation and First Habitants section, so that should be removed.

Content is detailed enough to not be overwhelming, relevant, and covers gaps in the original article. It discusses underrepresented populations such as First Nations interests.

The content is more ecological based, which makes the article more holistic. The original article talks a lot about human activities and what people can do when visiting the park.

The tone is neutral and non-biased. Some sentences could be improved by combining them to be more concise. Sections are well-organized for the most part. The beginning of the article could include more information regarding the first three paragraphs.

Pictures included are licensed and do not violate any copyright laws.

For fine-scale organization, technical sentences could be added, such as topic sentences, conclusion sentences, and transitions.

Some statements require references right afterwards. The references for some sections are placed at the end of the entire paragraph, but it should be placed after every sentence where information was derived from a source.