User:BCBulldog2023/White-footed mouse/Curioussoul25 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BCBulldog2023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BCBulldog2023/White-footed_mouse?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)\
 * White-footed mouse

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * The Lead has been updated to the new topic about how the city human infrastructure has caused isolation of white mouse populations.
 * Yes the article does have a clear starting sentence. However I think instead of saying park populations you should say white mouse populations.
 * I think the lead should mention the topics like metabolism, detoxification, and reproduction.
 * Yes the Lead does include information that has not been discussed because the article does not mention that impact of infrastructure and parks on the mouse populations.
 * The Lead is concise but I feel like it needs to include a little bit more information.

Content


 * Content is related to to the article but goes more in depth to form a connection between the urban city and white mouse population which is a really good topic.
 * The content is up to date and has a neutral tone and just discuses information. I like how the article discussed diseases and you added a section yourself for immunity.

Sources:


 * The sources used are reliable because they are scientific journals which is essential
 * I also liked how for the sources you used the article on how populations may adapt in response to local urban pressures relating to the white mouse and urban cities
 * All sources are from recent time from 2013-2017 not too long ago

Organization:


 * The Organization is good I advise you to section and place topics you have written under the places it is relevant to in the article.
 * Also add more of your own words rather too many citations

Images and Media:


 * Did not include pictures yet but will soon I think. Definitely include some where the mouse is in a urban city and prospect park

Guiding Questions:


 * Overall I really like the topics you are adding to the article I Think you should add more about the infrastructure and how the city architecture influences white mouse populations and their life styles

Tone and Balance:


 * The tone is neutral
 * I like how you used "may" for how the white mouse population is exposed to harsh pollutants because you do not pick a side and stay neutral.
 * The content added does not persuade the reader to one side but it mentions information.