User:BKilkenny/Athlete activism in the United States/Ammaclennan Peer Review

General info
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 * Whose work are you reviewing?   BKilkenny


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:BKilkenny/Athlete activism in the United States


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Athlete activism in the United States ==

Evaluate the drafted changes
== Lead: There is sufficient Lead to introduce the topic and describe the article topic. Relatively clear topic sentence. Leaves some room for interpretation in the last sentence when talking about recent changes in activist support. Not entirely clear what has been added from the previous revisions. It is not overly detailed but provides needed information. Content: Good separation of content that supports the information needed to understand the topic. The content is directly relevant to the topic. There are mostly up to date content sources. Additional content could include other sports groups that are not nationally recognized, and more detail in the feminism section that applies women's sports to the entire conversation-- rather than feminism as a whole. Where is the women's leagues and activism within those? Does do a good job of attempting to fill a content gap. Tone and Balance:  Mostly neutral, however has some fluctuating tone which I presume is important to keep the reader interested in the reading. Has occasional bias of what is important or the gravity of certain impacts on activism, but does a good job of laying out the factual information. Sources and References:  Links that were checked worked. Sources are mostly current and have high relevancy to the topic. I think with additional sections as discussed, more sources can be added to provide a more thorough view of current activism in athletics-- especially considering developments in transgender participants of women's sports over the last month!    Organization, Images and Media:   The organization was alright, I personally would have separated the national leagues under one heading, then included non nationally recognized teams, then would have dove into specifics of feminism and women's sports, then social media either at the end or throughout each of the other sections. It feels a bit choppy and unclear why each section was included to dissect activism. The phots added are helpful, however there could be more-- at least one per section if not multiple. No other media was included. Overall Impression:  This includes a lot of useful knowledge with good sources. I was happy to see more current events such as George Floyd's movements, and think it would be beneficial to have the article continually updated. Other comments as described above. ==