User:BL Elsner/Employment discrimination/Siyuxu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BL Elsner


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Employment discrimination
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
First of all, this article defines employment discrimination clearly from the beginning and distinguishes employment discrimination from wage discrimination. I think this is a good start, and it very much regulates the scope of the discussion in this article in detail. Secondly, I found that the author unconsciously uses a non-neutral status tone when describing what happened and how it happened. For example, the author will cut to employment discrimination from the perspective that she herself interviewed a lesbian, but this is a first person perspective is not in line with Wikipedia writing norms, and I think this needs to be changed. When I opened the article, I found that Wikipedia tagged the article (the views in this article are for the US only) but as I read it, I also found many legal texts and definitions of employment discrimination in other countries, such as the UK. I think it is possible to improve the current situation of employment discrimination in other countries again, which can make this article more complete.