User:BL Elsner/Employment discrimination/Yuxiang Dou Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BL Elsner


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * BL Elsner/Employment discrimination


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Employment discrimination

Evaluate the drafted changes
The issue of employment discrimination has been analyzed from different perspectives. There are discussions about "gender", "religion", etc. I think the introduction section expresses the topic to be discussed in the article very clearly and concisely. It also includes introductory sentences that give the article a clear structure and make it easy for the reader to enter the article and understand the topic.

The tone of the article is very pertinent and unbiased, analyzing the reasons for the existence of employment discrimination from the perspective of social and historical reasons. It describes this widespread problem in society in an unbiased way.

The government's approach to the problem and the laws introduced to address it are also discussed extensively in BL Elsner's references, and its impact on society and individuals is discussed in an accessible manner.

The sources and references section is very comprehensive in terms of quantity, citing many legal texts, and since they are laws, no biased statements appear.

The re-references also have many data and graphs appearing in the text at the same time. The sources of these data and graphs are authoritative and therefore credible, which enhances the overall credibility of the article and makes it easier for the reader to grasp key information from the data. If possible, the different types of discrimination could be defined, which would allow the reader to grasp the key information more quickly, because if each person has a different understanding of discrimination, then the understanding of the issue of employment discrimination would be very different.