User:BRICHH1/Peer tutor/TiffaniHiett Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BRICHH1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BRICHH1/Peer_tutor?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Peer tutor

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

There does not appear to be any updated information in the lead.

Content:

The content that was added in the draft is relevant to the topic of Peer Review and it does a better job of thoroughly explaining the concept of peer review without over complicating. However, there is only a very small amount of new and up-to-date information that was in the draft. Try to think within the last 10 years. In the first sentence of the draft, make sure to find evidence to support the claim that a peer can establish better rapport than a teacher for educational purposes. This is, however, a good point to include in the article so try to keep it in there!

Tone and Balance:

I did feel like I was reading a school advertisement for a peer tutor program one moment and then a lot of technical jargon the next. This can make it difficult for the reader to follow along.

Organization:

There are somethings in the new information that are also written about in the older information at the bottom of the page, it skips around a lot. Try to reorganize in a way that all the information that is closely related is in the same paragraph or subheading. Overall, the draft has a lot of grammatical and punctuation errors that can make the flow of the article very choppy or hard to read.