User:BSI26/Mobile phone use in schools/Sultanmoe Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BSI26


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:BSI26/Mobile_phone_use_in_schools?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The content added directly linked to the topic. The author did a great job of breaking the topic into two sections: positive and negative aspects of mobile phones in school. Although the content is not completely up to date, the majority of the sources were from pre-pandemic era. Schools have gone through several changes since the beginning of the pandemic. The content for the past few years is extremely important and it is missing. The article does not directly deal with historically underrepresented populations because it addresses the general public as whole. But at the same time, the issue of mobile phones within schools leaves out people who can not afford a mobile phone.

Reading through the article I felt that the content someone attempts to persuade me that mobiles in schools have more of a negative impact, than a positive impact. It wasn’t because of the tone of the article but simply the author provided more negative aspects than positive. There is no appearance of heavily biased work, although more information was provided for one side.

The references were reliable, and the content accurately reflects what they have cited. The author did an a great job of linking them together, the cited work matches perfectly with the content and reference. The Author provides sources that help support his article and they are diverse but unfortunately, they are not up to date, the only recommendation I would give is to write up a section on the use of mobile phones in schools in the past couple years, when Covid-19 first struck.

For the overall organization, the author did a great job of keeping their work concise, clear and easy to read. The format was very well organized and have no grammatical or spelling errors. The breakdown into sections made it even easier to read.