User:BUsunz/Venus Anadyomene (Titian)/Ngal7 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * BUsunz
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:BUsunz/Venus Anadyomene (Titian)

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * The lead has been changed to reflect different details about the source but some of it should be moved to description, such as description of Venus. The first sentence can be added to the lead that is already in the published article.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * yes, somewhat, although it does not elaborate on history but does on description
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * no
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * concise

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * no references to tell
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * history would be good to add, and also maybe a commission section because the history of Titian's commissions is usually interesting
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * yes, I think it will once the history is filled

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * no
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * yes, the description is already in the article so I wouldn't go too further into description
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * no

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * no, add sources
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * yes the elaborate on what is already presented in the article
 * Are the sources current?
 * no way to tell because not cited
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * yes the added content is clear
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * yes, "an oil painting", check for flow
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * yes but I would add a section for commission

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * adds some detail about description
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * more detail in a topic the article covers
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * once it has more sections, more information can be added, also, needs to cite sources