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Original entry
Soccer in the Sand is a series of amateur beach soccer tournaments held at beach locations in eight states throughout the United States. The tournaments feature local adult and child competitors organized into teams of seven to ten members, with five on field at any given time. The teams compete in one- or two-day tournaments, depending on location, with each team playing at least three games, and top teams advancing farther. The series was created in 2006

New entry (my edits):
Soccer in the Sand is a series of beach soccer tournaments held at beach locations in eight different states throughout the United States and Australia. The tournaments feature competitors organized into teams of six-eleven members. The teams compete in one or two day tournaments, depending on location. The beach will be split into different soccer field for the tournament to be played on. This series was created in 2006. Chris Lemay is credited for the existence of these tournaments. Soccer in the sand tournaments also provide skills clinics the Friday before a tournament. Not only do they hold clinics, they also donate money to organizations locally of where the tournament was held. A tournament benefit is held and players are encouraged to bring the whole family and spend time on the beach. The tournament held at Grand Haven, Michigan hosts 20,000 people including players, coaches, and fans.

Vetter's Feedback


 * Put the title of the article "Soccer in the sand" in bold text format
 * Chris Lemay is "credited" rather than "creditable"
 * "A benefit of this tournament includes that it is encouraged for players to bring the whole family and spend some time on the beach." This sentence needs to be revised for clarity. "A tournament benefit is held and players are encouraged to bring the whole family and spend time on the beach."

Original Locations
Tournaments are held on local public beaches and parks at beach destinations throughout the West Coast, Great Lakes, Florida, & others. Current cities include:


 * Grand Haven, Michigan
 * Santa Barbara, California
 * San Diego, California
 * Seaside, Oregon
 * Jacksonville, Florida
 * Cleveland, Ohio
 * Michigan City, Indiana
 * Detroit, Michigan
 * Erie, Pennsylvania
 * Rochester, New York

New locations (my edits):
Tournaments are held at the following locations:


 * Kirra Beach, Gold Coast, Australia
 * Santa Barbara, California
 * San Diego, California
 * Clearwater Beach, Florida
 * Chicago, Illinois
 * Michigan City, Indiana
 * Detroit, Michigan
 * Grand Haven, Michigan
 * Muskegon, Michigan
 * Traverse City, Michigan
 * Rochester, New York
 * Cleveland, Ohio
 * Seaside, Oregon
 * Erie, Pennsylvania
 * Racine, Wisconsin

New Format (my edits):
The series is composed of fifteen separate annual tournaments of soccer played in the sand starting in early June and running through November. Each tournament features different competitors of soccer players that are grouped into different divisions and teams based on age, and gender. When registering the oldest player of the team is how it is determined what age group the team should be in. Females may play in either the female or male division, but boys may only play in the boys division. To be able to play for more than one team, the player must be playing on two teams in either different age groups, or different divisions. Each team can't have more than eleven players on it, unless it is a coed team, then the roster limit is twelve. Soccer in the sand consists of two tournaments that are either a one day tournament or a two day tournament depending on the location. Each team is guaranteed three games in the original bracket they are placed in. The time of the games varies depending on if it is a one day or two day tournament. For two day tournaments the games consist three eleven minute periods with two minute breaks between the periods. Meanwhile if it is a one day tournament games get two halves consisting of twelve minutes each with a two minute half time. The number of players on the field varies by location, some tournaments play a 6v6 including the goalkeeper and some are 5v5 including the goalkeeper. One player from each team will compete in either "rock, paper, scissors" or a coin toss to compete for the first kickoff or their choice of side to defend. If it is a two day tournament the referee will again flip a coin between periods two and three for the same thing to occur as it did at kickoff. The tournament is set up into different brackets. In the tournament the winning team of the game gains three points, a tie gets both teams one point, and the losing team receives zero points. In order to advance out of the original bracket and into playoffs the team must have the most points from their wins or ties. If two teams are tied on points to advance out of the bracket they can settle it by either a head to head, total goal differential of the tournament, or a shoot out.

Vetter's Feedback


 * I left some comments on D2L about the "girls" "boys" language - use Male/female or men/women.
 * Remember to put in wikilcnks to relevant ideas (links to other wiki articles). I can show you how to do this in class.
 * Finally in the References, section, you need more information than just the link and title.

Original Format
The series is composed of 12 separate, annual tournaments, starting in late June and running through August. Each tournament features a new set of competitors composed mainly of local and regional soccer players grouped into divisions and teams based on age. The teams play at least three competitive matches with top teams in each division advancing to playoffs. The length of the game varies by location of the tournament being played.