User:Bandile Masilela/Internet addiction disorder/CCroft13 Peer Review

Hi Bandile!

I thought your article was really good! I liked all of the information given and you did a really good job staying neutral through your writing and giving straight, solid information. The majority of my peer reviews are just grammar things or some spots where I thought you could have a little more information! "However, the diagnosis of Gaming disorder has been included in the ICD-11. Controversy exists around the diagnosis including whether the disorder is a separate clinical entity, or if it is a manifestation of underlying psychiatric disorders.

Maybe list “psychiatric disorders such as…” if there is more information on what different disorders they may be in play.

Parental educational level, age at first use of the Internet, and the frequency of using social networking sites and gaming sites are found to be positively associated with excessive Internet use among adolescents in some European countries, as well as in the USA.

Positively associated according to what?

A study conducted by David S. Bickham (2021) titled "Current Research and Viewpoints on Internet Addiction in Adolescents" found that internet addiction is a growing concern among adolescents, with many spending a significant amount of time online and exhibiting problematic use behaviors, such as compulsive internet use and withdrawal symptoms when offline. The study also highlighted that certain demographic factors, such as gender and socioeconomic status, may be associated with higher rates of internet addiction

Link?

Parental educational level, age at first use of the Internet, and the frequency of using social networking sites and gaming sites are found to be positively associated with excessive Internet use among adolescents in some European countries, as well as in the USA.

Might include link to database/study where it says this